The gap between the rich and the poor is becoming wider; the rich are becoming richer, and the poor are getting even poorer. What problems can the situation cause? What can be done to reduce this gap?
Sample Response
There is no doubt that the gap between the rich and the poor todaythe gap present clearly today between the poor and the rich is widening over timeis getting wider by time and is affecting our way of life. This was previously observed only in some communitiesThat was only observed in the past in some communities where a country's wealth was concentrated amongthe wealth of a country was restricted to a few powerful and connected people. They used to own more than eighty percent of the resources and income, while the remainder was barely enoughwhile the rest is barely enough for the common people. Nowadays, the difference is significant but not limited to society's elitethe societies finest. Society is divided into groups, the rich, the poor and the few managing to enjoy some of the rich benefits but struggling to keep this level, they are bouncing between the limits of each of the other groups. As a result of today's situation, a broadband of the poor are striving to get a fair share of prosperity with no actual hope, the fabric of the society is getting weaker and therefore each group is more colonised to itself forming new habits and customs. Bridging this gap can only be done if equality iswas achieved in basic needs like education and healthcare. If adequate access was providedacceptable ease was managed for the common people in their daily lives throughin their daily routines like public transporttransportations and business facilities, that would also be helpful. There must be transparent laws to manage the use of wealth and the equality of sharing it and monitor any possible corruption. The principlesense of equal opportunity must be communicated to and accepted byhas to be delivered and believed by all people. Briefly, no community can prosper and evolve safely unless gaps between people are narrowed in every areathe gaps are bridged between people in all aspects giving a fair chance to everyone to live in comfort if they workworked reasonably hard to achieve thisit.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response addresses both problems and solutions, identifying social fragmentation and proposing fairer access to education, healthcare, services, opportunity, and transparent laws. However, the problem analysis remains vague, all ideas run together in one paragraph, and frequent inaccurate vocabulary and sentence construction make several claims difficult to interpret. Define one or two concrete consequences, organise problems and solutions separately, and express each measure in simpler, more precise language.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Both parts of the task are addressed with several relevant ideas, but the stated social problems and proposed mechanisms are often broad or insufficiently explained.
Develop one concrete problem, such as social tension, and show exactly how equal access to education or healthcare would reduce the gap.
Coherence and Cohesion
A broad movement from background to problems, solutions, and conclusion is visible, but one-block presentation and long run-on sentences weaken progression.
Use separate paragraphs for causes of harm and proposed solutions, with one main idea and explanation in each.
Lexical Resource
The response attempts varied social and economic vocabulary, but frequent misuse in phrases such as ‘a broadband of the poor’ and ‘colonised to itself’ obscures meaning.
Choose familiar, accurate terms such as ‘a broad section of poorer people’ and ‘social groups become increasingly isolated’.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A range of structures is attempted, but sentence boundaries, agreement, articles, tense, and conditional forms are frequently inaccurate.
Break long sentences into complete clauses and review conditional consistency, especially ‘if equality were achieved’ and related result clauses.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
The gap between the rich and the poor is becoming wider; the rich are becoming richer, and the poor are getting even poorer. What problems can the situation cause? What can be done to reduce this gap?
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