The pie chart shows the amount of money that a children's charity located in the USA spent and received in one year.
Sample Response
The given pie charts illustrate how a children's charity in the USA received and spent moneycollected and used its money in a year. The first chart shows six revenue sourcesis categorized into 6 different revenue sources and the second one is divided into three expenditure categories3 purposes of expenditures. Overall, it can be seen that the charityfoundation obtained the largest share of its revenuelargest portion of its money from donated foodthe donated food. MeanwhileOn the other hand, it spent most of its money on program servicesthe program services. To begin with, 86.6 per cent of the charity's revenue86.6 per cent of revenue for this children's charity came from donated food in a year, which is over eight times as much as community contributionscontributions from the community (10.4%). These two sources accounted for exactly 97 per cent of the total income. Additionally, more than two per cent of its incomemore than two per cent income was generated by program revenueprovided by the program revenue. Finally, the government grants and other income were negligiblealmost unnoticeable, each below 0.5 per centless than 0.5 per cent. At the same time, the charity had to spend almost 96% on its program services. Of the remaining 4.2% of expenditureRegarding the remaining 4.2 per cent of expenditures, 2.6% was for fundraising and the remaining 1.6%the rest was spent onfor management and general purposes. It is worth noticing that the total amount of income was $53,561,580, which was just enough to cover the expenditures of $53,224,896. At the end of the year, the charity had savingsa saving of just over 330 thousand dollars.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response gives a clear overview and accurately selects nearly all major proportions and totals, including the charity’s small annual surplus. Its main limitation is minor imprecision in covering the smallest revenue sources, alongside several awkward noun and preposition choices. The highest-priority improvement is to name all three minor income categories precisely and polish a few expressions while retaining the concise comparisons.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The dominant revenue and expenditure categories, their key percentages, both totals, and the resulting surplus are reported accurately, with only investment income omitted from the minor sources.
Mention investment income alongside government grants and other income so that all small revenue categories are represented precisely.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ideas move logically from the overview to revenue and expenditure details, but the entire report is presented as one paragraph despite distinct information groups.
Use separate paragraphs for the overview, revenue sources, and expenditures and totals to make the strong internal progression more visible.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is varied and generally precise, with effective terms for proportions and financial categories, though a few expressions such as “purposes of expenditures” and “had a saving” are unnatural.
Prefer natural financial collocations such as “areas of expenditure,” “generated revenue,” and “recorded a surplus.”
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A varied range of complex sentences is controlled well and meaning remains consistently clear, with only occasional article, preposition, and noun-form errors.
Refine small constructions such as “more than two per cent of income” and “spent on management” to improve grammatical accuracy.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The pie chart shows the amount of money that a children's charity located in the USA spent and received in one year.
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