The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002.
Sample Response
The table illustrates the proportions of consumer expenditureproportion of expenditure of citizens from five countriesfive various nations in 2002in the year 2002. In general, it can be seen that all five countriesevery consumer in all the five countries allocated a higher proportion of expendituretended to spend more money on food, drinks and tobacco than clothing and footwear, followed byclothing and footwear, which was then followed by leisure and education.
Regarding food, drinks and tobaccoFirst of all, Turkey was the country with the highest share of spendingcountry where citizens spent most of their money on food, drinks and tobacco (32.14%) compared with all the other countriesthan any other countries whose figures were below 30%which were lower than 30%. A similar trend can be observed for the spending on leisure and education, that is consumers in Turkey allocated the majority of their money in this sector (4.35%) compared to other nations (less than 3.50%) with the minority of consumers from Spain (1.98%).
Turning to expenditure onTurning to the expenditure on clothing and footwear, Italy wasturned out to be the country where the highest share of income was spent on clothing and footwearwhich had its citizens to spend most of their incomes to buy clothes and footwear (9.00%), which was then followed by Turkey (6.63%) and the country with the lowestleast spending on these itemsstuff was Sweden (5.40%). AdditionallyBesides, Sweden was also the country which spent the least money on food, drinks and tobacco among the five countries (15.77%2.21%).
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response establishes a clear overview and selects several useful high and low points, giving the report a focused comparison across spending categories. Its main limitation is accuracy, especially the claim that Sweden spent 2.21% on food, drinks and tobacco when the table shows 15.77%, alongside some awkward comparison structures. Check every cited figure against the table, then express each ranking in a simpler, grammatically controlled sentence.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
A clear overview and relevant category leaders are presented, but one important Swedish figure is reported inaccurately.
Verify each number against its row and category, particularly Sweden's 15.77% food, drinks and tobacco figure.
Coherence and Cohesion
The report progresses logically from the overview to category-based comparisons, although some long sentences and references are awkward.
Use shorter comparison sentences and make each pronoun or relative clause refer unambiguously to one country or category.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary covers expenditure and comparison adequately, but several choices such as "minority of consumers" and "these stuff" are imprecise or informal.
Prefer precise expressions such as "the lowest proportion" and "these items" while reducing repetition of "spent" and "consumers".
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of sentence forms is attempted, but recurring comparative, article, agreement and clause-control errors weaken accuracy.
Practise structures such as "Turkey spent more than the other countries" and proofread articles, plurals and relative clauses.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002.
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