The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004.
Sample Response
The line graph gives information on weekly fish and meat consumption per person in a European country between 1979 and 2004.
In 1979, the most widely consumed meatmost eaten kind of meat was beef and the least consumed itemthe least one was fish. People in this country ate roughly about 210 grams of beef225 gm beef per week while theysuch people consumed only 60 grams of fish60 gm fish in a week. Beef consumption fellfluctuated between 1979 and 1984, rose slightly over the next five yearslevelled in nest 5 years and then fell from about 180 grams to about 110 gramsdecreased dramatically from 225 gm to 100 gm per week from 1989 to 2004per week 1989 to 2004. Fish consumption also declinedalso had been declining from 60 gm to about 40 grams over the 25-year period45 gm in 25 year period.
The other notableoutstanding trends in the consumption of meatconsumption of kinds of meat indicated in the graph are chicken and lamb. They had converse directions. In 1979, the amount of chicken consumed per personweight of consumed chicken by an individual was 140 grams per week, whichgrammes per week which increasedhad been increased significantly to 250 gm per week in 2004. By contrast, people in such European country had diminished drastically their lamb consumption from 150 gm to 60 gm per week in 25 year period.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response covers all four series and generally communicates the major upward and downward trends, with clear paragraphing by data group. Its main limitation is the lack of a distinct overview and several imprecise figures and trend descriptions, especially for beef, chicken, and lamb. Prioritise a concise overview comparing the dominant changes and verify each key value against the graph before reporting it.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
All four categories and their broad directions are covered, but there is no distinct overview and several values or trend details are imprecise.
Add a clear overview highlighting chicken's rise above beef and check endpoint figures carefully against the graph.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response progresses logically from beef and fish to chicken and lamb, though some referencing and transitions are awkward.
Use clearer comparative links and direct nouns instead of vague references such as “such people” and “They”.
Lexical Resource
There is sufficient topic vocabulary for describing trends, but several collocations and word choices are unnatural or inaccurate.
Prefer precise forms such as “beef consumption,” “over the next five years,” and “fell” rather than strained expressions.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of sentence forms conveys the meaning, but recurring article, preposition, tense, and passive-form errors reduce control.
Use simple past consistently for completed historical trends and check articles and prepositions in every data sentence.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004.
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