The bar chart shows the number of visitors to three London Museums between 2007 and 2012.
Sample Response
The diagram compares the number of visitors tovisitors’ number to three museums in London between 2007 and 2012. Overall, the National GalleryOverall, National Gallery, despite its lowest attendanceleast popularity in the early yearsin early years, managed to become the most visited museum in London in 2012. As is presented in the diagram, Victoria and Albert Museum received the highest number of visitorsvisitants in 2007, roughly 13 million. At that time, National Gallery and the British Museum received 6 and 12 million visitorsspectators respectively. During the next two yearsDuring next two years, Victoria and Albert Museum retained first placeenjoyed its first position in terms of visitor numbersterms of visitors’ number, but it was a close tie with the National Gallery in 2009. In 2009, all threeThis year all three museums were visited by the least number of people, around 8 million to National Gallery and Victoria and Albert Museum and only 6 million to the British Museum. The highest number of people (approximately 11.5 million) visited the National Gallery in 2010 and the other two museumsother two museums attracted 6–7 million visitors6-7 million fans. In 2012, National Gallery became the most popular museum in London with roughly 16 million visitorsobservers. The British Museum that yearin this year attractedsold tickets to nearly 14 million people and the least visitants preferred the Victoria and Albert Museum during this time.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response follows a broadly clear chronology and accurately reports several major values, especially the National Gallery's rise to first place by 2012. However, it omits 2011 and incorrectly suggests that every museum reached its lowest attendance in 2009; strained synonyms for visitors also reduce precision. Prioritise including the missing year and identifying each museum's actual low point before refining the language for visitor numbers.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The main rise of the National Gallery and several yearly comparisons are reported, but 2011 is omitted and the claim that all three museums were lowest in 2009 is inaccurate.
Cover 2011 and distinguish the actual lows: the National Gallery in 2007, the Victoria and Albert Museum in 2010, and the British Museum in 2008-2009.
Coherence and Cohesion
The chronological progression is generally easy to follow, though the single-paragraph format and abrupt year references make the report less clearly structured.
Separate the overview from two chronological detail paragraphs and use explicit year-based links rather than repeated phrases such as "this year."
Lexical Resource
There is some range in trend language, but repeated substitutes such as "visitants," "spectators," "fans" and "observers" are inappropriate for museum attendance.
Use the precise terms "visitors," "visitor numbers," "attendance" and "attracted" consistently throughout the report.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of sentence types conveys the main message, but article omissions, malformed noun phrases and awkward clause structures recur.
Revise phrases such as "the number of visitors," "during the next two years" and "the other two museums," and include "the" before museum names where required.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The bar chart shows the number of visitors to three London Museums between 2007 and 2012.
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