The graph shows Underground Station passenger numbers in London.
Sample Response
The line graph depicts the variation in the number of London subway passengers from 6:00 to 22:00from 6 a.m. to 22 p.m. on a typical day. At a glance, the busiest time is 8 a.m. and 6 p.m.
InitiallyTo commence with, the highest passenger numbersa large proportion of total people use the underground railwayuse underground railway facility at 8 a.m. and 6 p.m. which are about 400 and 380, respectivelywhich is about 400. From 6 a.m. to 8 a.m. the steep incline in the number of passengers from 100 to 400. In the next hour, it again falls to 300plummets back into 175. Though there is a slight increase in the number of passengers, it remains the same that is almost 300 from 12.00 to 2.00 p.m. Then the total figure of travellers declines by 200 from 300declines 100 from 300 within two hours. Interestingly, in the morning at 6 a.m.at morning (6 a.m.) and at 4 p.m. almost an equal number of people use underground transporttransportations, which is 100. In spite of a slight rise at 9 p.m.a small hike at 9 p.m., the underground system has about 125 travellers at 20:00 and 140 at 22:00an equal number of travellers at 20.00 and 22.00 hours.
To conclude, the London Underground remainsLondon underground station remains busy during commuting hoursat office hours.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response identifies the two main rush-hour peaks and follows the graph broadly in chronological order, giving the reader a workable account of the daily pattern. Its main limitation is that several figures and comparisons are imprecise, including the evening peak and the values at 20:00 and 22:00. The priority is to verify every stated number and comparison while using complete, grammatically controlled sentences.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
A relevant overview identifies both major peaks, and most of the daily fluctuations are selected, but several values and comparisons are inaccurate or imprecise.
Check each reported figure against the graph and distinguish the 18:00 peak of about 380 from the 08:00 maximum of 400.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response progresses mainly by time and uses clear paragraph boundaries, although some links are mechanical and the final conclusion adds little.
Group the morning, midday, and evening movements into a clearer sequence and remove the repetitive one-sentence conclusion.
Lexical Resource
There is enough range to describe rises and falls, but recurring collocation problems such as “underground railway facility” and “transportations” reduce precision.
Use standard chart language such as passenger numbers, rose to, fell by, remained stable, and underground services.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mixture of sentence forms is attempted, but fragments, article errors, and faulty clause structures occur regularly while meaning remains generally clear.
Ensure every trend statement has a finite verb and check articles, prepositions, and agreement before finalising the report.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The graph shows Underground Station passenger numbers in London.
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