The graph below shows the student involvement in three sports in a school based on which grades they are studying in.
Sample Response
The graph presents the participation of students in grades 8, 9 and 10engagement of grades 8, 9 and 10 students in three different outdoor games namely,namely: cricket, soccer and basketball. Overall,Obviously, it is clear that most students are more involvedengrossed in cricket thanthat the other two sports and soccer was their second choicefootball, as a sport, was their second choice. The trend presented in the diagram shows that more than half of the grade eightnice students prefer cricket while students in the other gradesthe other graders have slightly lower participation ratesmarginally lesser interests in joining this sport at 45% and 40%, respectivelywith 45% and 40% cricket players respectively. DeleteHowever, it is quite obvious that the participants from these grades mainly play cricket. On the other hand, soccer ranks secondfootball comes at the second choice as an outdoor sport among these pupils. Exactly a quarterAt least a quarter of grade eight students played soccerjoined in to play football while 30%roughly one-third of ninth graders are involved in playing this sportsports. Furthermore, 32%more than 30 percent of students in grade ten participate in soccerfootball. Lastly, basketball is one of the least preferred sport by the students of these classes having less than a third of the students interested in playing it. Overall, it is safe to say that most students prefer to play cricketplay the cricket regardless of what grade they are in.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response identifies the dominant overall pattern and reports the soccer figures reasonably clearly, using a mostly understandable sequence. However, it assigns the 55% cricket figure to grade nine rather than Class VIII, gives little precise basketball data, and contains frequent awkward or incorrect forms. Prioritize matching every value to the correct class and reporting the basketball progression with exact percentages.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The overview correctly identifies cricket as most popular, but a major class-label error and limited basketball detail weaken coverage.
Match 55%, 45%, and 40% to Classes VIII, IX, and X respectively, then report the basketball rise from 20% to 28%.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response moves through the sports in a generally logical order, but repetition and absent paragraphing weaken progression.
Use a separate overview and organize the details into clear comparison paragraphs without restating the same main trend.
Lexical Resource
There is sufficient range to describe preferences and participation, though several word choices and collocations are unnatural.
Prefer precise phrases such as 'participation rate,' 'second most popular,' and 'students in each class.'
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Meaning is generally clear, but frequent agreement, article, comparative, and word-form errors limit grammatical control.
Check structures such as 'more interested than,' 'this sport,' and 'the least preferred sport' throughout the response.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The graph below shows the student involvement in three sports in a school based on which grades they are studying in.
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