The graph below shows the average number of UK commuters travelling each day by car, bus or train between 1970 and 2030.
Sample Response
The chart illustrates the average number of commutersreturns of passengers using the three modes of transport: car, bus and trainvarious modes of transportation, cars, buses or trains each dayin their day to day life in the United Kingdom over the 60-year periodover 60 years.
Overall, it is immediately apparent from the chart the highest modal transport used by commuters was called and increased over the years from the initial stage, while bus and train had some significant changes after 2020.
To begin, the majority of commuters in the UKin the UK majority of individuals travelled by carapproached the car for the purpose of travelling with the figure beginning at about 5 millionbeginning at 5 million in 1970. While this ratio steadily failed in inclined by 2 million after the year 1980 and remained the same in the next ten years. Moreover, this value rose steadilyskyrocketed and hit its peak at about 9 million commutersat 9 million commuters using the car in their daily routine in the final year. Therefore, the bus had a negative trend with shares at 4 million of travel using this transportation in 1970 and the ceiling trend got declined over the years and plummeted by below the 4 million after 30 years.
Afterwards, the value declined graduallytook a nosedive and reachedtouched the barrier of 3 million people travelling by bus in 2030. It is interesting2030.it is interesting to note that the trend was reversed for trains, which started withthe situation got reversed in train category started with 2 million passengers travelling2 million passenger travel by train in 1970 and this amount changed only slightlyhad nominal changes and rose by 1 million after 30 years and remained unchanged for the next ten yearsand with no major changes in next ten years. Meanwhile, a sharp increase was observed, reaching nearly 5 milliona sharp inclination had observed and touched the number of nearly 5 Million in 2030.
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response’s strongest feature is its coverage of all three transport modes with several broadly accurate starting and ending values. Its main limitation is that frequent awkward wording and grammatical breakdowns make trends difficult to follow, while the overview only partly captures the key patterns. Focus first on stating each mode’s direction and the train-bus crossover clearly in simple, accurate sentences.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response reports the main endpoints for all modes, but the overview is incomplete and some descriptions of timing and change are inaccurate or unclear.
Give a precise overview that cars remain highest, buses decline, trains rise and overtake buses, then support it with correctly timed figures.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response has a recognisable introduction, overview, and detail sequence, but misused connectors and long, loosely joined sentences disrupt progression.
Group the rising modes and declining bus trend logically, using one clear comparison per sentence and only necessary linking words.
Lexical Resource
A range of trend vocabulary is attempted, but frequent inappropriate choices and collocations such as approached the car and ceiling trend often obscure meaning.
Prefer accurate, neutral terms such as commuters travelled by car, remained stable, declined gradually, and rose sharply.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Some basic sentence patterns are controlled, but frequent errors in sentence boundaries, verb forms, articles, agreement, and passive structures cause reading difficulty.
Write shorter complete sentences with one finite verb, then check subject-verb agreement, articles, and punctuation before adding complex clauses.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The graph below shows the average number of UK commuters travelling each day by car, bus or train between 1970 and 2030.
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