For the past year, you have been a member of a local club. Now you want to discontinue your membership. Write a letter to the club secretary. In your letter: - state what type of membership you have and how you have paid for this - give details on how you have benefited from the club - explain why you want to leave
Sample Response
Dear Mr Brooke, I regret to inform you that I have to discontinue my level 2 membership at your Golden Hook Fishing Club. I joined the Club a year ago and the benefits of participatingthe benefits of the participation well exceeded the membership fee. I am hoping that you would help me complete the formal processfinish the official procedure to cancel my membership. I received numerous benefits from the club as a level 2 member. The roundtables and lectures byof famous fishermen were absolutely brilliant. Moreover, discounts on equipmentthe equipment in sports gear shops was a money saver. Last but not least, your monthly illustrated magazine was a precious treat for me. Unfortunately, I have to move to France next month because of my father's health condition. I must acknowledge that continuing the membership of your Club is no longer an option for me as I will be leaving London soon. I have paid my monthly fee using my credit card and my card detailsits details could be found in your database. I request you not to charge me any membership fee next monthfor the next month. I am ready to fill in the membership cancellation form at your office next Monday. I wish every success of this club and its members. Yours sincerely, John Philip
Why this response received Band 7.0
The letter communicates its purpose clearly, covers every requested point with specific benefits and an appropriate explanation for leaving, and maintains a suitably formal tone. Its main limitation is that the entire response forms one dense paragraph, while a few awkward collocations and agreement errors reduce polish; the highest-priority improvement is to organise the content into clear functional paragraphs and proofread grammatical agreement.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The purpose is immediately clear, all three bullet points are fully covered, and the formal register is consistently suitable.
Make the payment and cancellation arrangements slightly more concise so the requested information remains the central focus.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ideas progress logically from the cancellation request through benefits and the reason for leaving, but the single-block format weakens paragraphing.
Separate the opening, membership benefits, reason for leaving, and practical cancellation request into distinct functional paragraphs.
Lexical Resource
The letter uses a good range of generally precise vocabulary, although phrases such as "benefits of the participation" and "precious treat" are somewhat unnatural.
Choose more idiomatic formal collocations, such as "the benefits of membership" and "a valuable benefit," to improve precision.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A varied mix of simple and complex sentences is mostly well controlled, with occasional errors that do not impede meaning.
Proofread subject-verb agreement and article use, particularly in phrases such as "discounts ... were a money saver."
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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1
For the past year, you have been a member of a local club. Now you want to discontinue your membership. Write a letter to the club secretary. In your letter:
- state what type of membership you have and how you have paid for this
- give details on how you have benefited from the club
- explain why you want to leave
Your response
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