Fashion trends are difficult to follow these days and it’s widely believed that they primarily exist just to sell clothes. Some people believe that we shouldn’t follow them and that we should dress in what we like and feel comfortable in. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?.
Sample Response
It’s widely believed in today’s materialistic world that the latest fashion trendslatest innovative fashion trends are highly influentialhold great significance. On the other hand, such trends are believed to be created solely to generate profitsset only in the pursuit of profits for large fashiondesigner companies. It seems that people are nowin recent times, people are now changing their minds with regard toin regards to wearing clothes for comfort and personal preferencefor comfort and as a personal choice. Personally, I agreePersonally I agree that we should pay more attention to individuality and comfort in the way we dress. Firstly, fashion designs exist as a form of creative artistic expression of the designer. Although this may be true, undoubtedly such designs reduce individualitytake away individuality once a trend is establishedset in place. By this I mean that there is nothing unique about wearing what everybody else does. More specifically, if everyone sports the latest colours and designs for summer skirtslatest colour and design in summer skirts, do we not look the same? Secondly, itIt is possible that fashion trends can look extremely stylish to the general public. However, it can be argued that the main purpose of wearing clothes is for more functional reasons. This is primarily due to the fact that clothes were traditionally worn to protect people from weatherclimatic conditions. For instance, clothes are still primarily wornworn basically to keep people warm and dry in winter and cool in summer. Finally, fashion certainly gives us a sense of confidence and pride in our appearance. While this is certainly a good point, it also means that following such rapidly changing trendssuch changeable trends proves to be expensive. For example, purchasing every item from the latest fashion seasonevery latest season’s fashion item will of course exceed many young people's budgetsblow the budget of many young people. In conclusion, there are various arguments to support the dismissal of fashion trends, consisting of not conforming, comfort and price, which I strongly agree with.
Why this response received Band 7.5
The response presents a clear, consistent position and develops three relevant reasons with appropriate examples, while its paragraph-by-paragraph rebuttal structure keeps the argument easy to follow. The main limitation is occasional awkward or overstated wording, so the highest-priority improvement is to refine collocations and express each supporting point more precisely and naturally for the reader.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response directly answers the question with a consistent opinion supported by developed points about individuality, practicality, and cost.
Strengthen the argument further by linking each reason more explicitly to the claim that fashion trends mainly serve commercial interests.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ideas follow a clear sequence, and the repeated concession-and-rebuttal pattern gives each main point a coherent internal structure.
Vary the mechanical numbered transitions and make the relationship between the introductory claims and the main reasons more direct.
Lexical Resource
The response uses a sufficiently wide range of topic vocabulary, though several combinations are awkward or unnecessarily emphatic.
Refine collocations such as references to seasonal purchases and designer expression so that they sound more idiomatic and exact.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Complex sentences are frequent and generally well controlled, with only occasional punctuation, capitalisation, and attachment problems.
Review sentence openings and concluding relative clauses to remove small errors and clarify exactly what each modifier refers to.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Fashion trends are difficult to follow these days and it’s widely believed that they primarily exist just to sell clothes. Some people believe that we shouldn’t follow them and that we should dress in what we like and feel comfortable in. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?.
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