The 21st century has begun. What changes do you think this new century will bring? Use examples and details in your answer.
Sample Response
The beginning of a new era, the 21st century,a new era, 21st century, raises the question in everyone's mindbrings the question to anyone's mind whether it is the beginning of a great shift"whether it is the beginning of a great shift?" Well, in my opinion, the changes will definitely bring a revolution to mankindto the mankind. As the world is progressing towards new and sophisticated technologiesthe new and sophisticated technologies and inventions, our lives are becoming easier and more comfortablerelaxed. The mode of communication is faster and cheaper than in earlier timesas compared to early times. In a fraction of a second, information can be transferred to athe distant part of the world. This is largely thanks toAll thanks go to the user-friendly applications, like the email feature, that are being invented for the welfare of mankind. In this new century, communication willwould be free of charge and more interactive. Secondly, the technology in this century will improve the quality of health care services provided to individualsfacilities given to an individual beyond expectations. The health care professionals will be more qualified and adept. Due to the advancement of researchadvancement of the research facilities, many deadly diseases will be eradicated. The quality of life willwould be significantly better and our lifespan would increase. Finally, space research in this century will reveal some answerswould unfurl some answers we have been seeking for a long timeseeking for a long. Maybe at the end of this century, humans wouldthis century human would be ready to live on another planet. But all these improvements and marvelsall these improvement and marvel would not come without athe cost. There is no doubt that humans would become somewhat enslavedhuman would become somewhat slaves in the handshand of technology. Their personal lives would be greatly affected by the overuse of technologyover usage of technology. More powerful weapons and the threat of nuclear war would be a great concern for the world population in this century. To conclude, this era would bring many marvellous discoveries to our life but at the same time, the perils of nuclear war would be a great anxiety for peace lovers all around the world.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response presents a clear, wide-ranging forecast and maintains a consistent view, with relevant discussion of communication, health care, space exploration, and technological risks. Its main limitation is that several ideas are asserted rather than illustrated in depth, while recurring article, agreement, and collocation problems reduce precision. The highest priority is to develop fewer predictions with specific examples while editing sentence-level grammar and word combinations more carefully.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response addresses the question directly through several relevant predictions and maintains a clear overall perspective on their benefits and risks.
Develop the most important predictions with specific examples and fuller explanation instead of moving quickly through several assertions.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ideas progress in a generally logical sequence with clear signposting, but the response is presented as one long paragraph despite distinct thematic stages.
Separate the introduction, major prediction groups, drawbacks, and conclusion into purposeful paragraphs while retaining the clear progression.
Lexical Resource
The response shows a good range of topic vocabulary, but recurring awkward collocations and word-form choices reduce naturalness and precision.
Prioritise accurate combinations such as advances in research, excessive use of technology, and at a cost rather than forcing less natural expressions.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex structures communicates meaning clearly, although errors in articles, agreement, plurals, and modal consistency recur.
Edit systematically for countable-noun agreement, article use, and consistent future forms, especially in sentences containing several clauses.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
The 21st century has begun. What changes do you think this new century will bring? Use examples and details in your answer.
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