In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?
Sample Response
In many Asian countries, there has always been an invisible pressure placed on men from birthpressure put on men since they were born. Such pressures can includeThose can be academic achievements, career successsuccess in career in various forms, such asvia various ways such as being at the top of one’s classin the top of a school, having a high-paying job or obviously, owning a private homeaccommodation. Because of conservative ideologyBecause of the conservative ideology, Asians usually consider a house to beconsider a house is an indicator of prosperity and high social statushigh-tier social status, not only for themselves but also for their families and children. Moreover, people usually want to claim ownership, and this is not new inthroughout human history. Take colonies, for example, people always desire something over which they can have absolute controlsomething that they can have absolute control over it. While a rent house may not satisfy your demand because you have minimal rights to do anything you want with it. As mentioned above, renting a house has certain disadvantagessome certain disadvantages. Firstly, it is definitely not a long-term investment even though you can avoid mortgage deposit and other taxes, but you will be under the supervision of the landlord all the time. For example, you cannot renovate or redecorate your home at all without the landlord’s permission. Next, if you choose this type of housing, you may run the risk oftake risk of having to move multiple timesbeing moved multiple times due to limited vacancies or the landlord selling the propertyproperty sale from the landlord. Last but not least, since the proprietor is in charge, he or she might suddenly raise the rent, and that is a really big issue when finances are limitedwhen you are in the condition of insufficient finance. Bottom line, possessing a house is better than renting one. Although you may have to be responsible for repairs, remodelling or pay land-related additional fees, it is yours and always be. No matter what happens to you, remember there is always a home waiting for you to returnawaiting you to come back.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response gives a clear preference for home ownership and offers relevant reasons involving social status, control, housing security, and rent increases. However, it treats the positive-or-negative question largely as a comparison with renting, so the broader effects of society's strong emphasis on ownership are only partly evaluated. The highest priority is to address that situation directly and develop a balanced rationale for the final judgement.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The reasons for valuing ownership are relevant and the positive view is clear, but the wider situation is evaluated only indirectly through drawbacks of renting.
Explain whether strong social pressure to own homes benefits or harms individuals and society, then justify that judgement explicitly.
Coherence and Cohesion
The ideas follow a recognisable sequence, but one continuous paragraph and mechanical listing make the progression less effective.
Organise the response into separate paragraphs for cultural reasons, practical reasons, evaluation, and conclusion.
Lexical Resource
The response uses a sufficient topic-related range, although frequent awkward collocations and imprecise expressions reduce naturalness.
Replace phrases such as private accommodation, rent house, and insufficient finance with precise, conventional academic wording.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Meaning remains generally clear and some complex forms are attempted, but fragments, run-ons, article errors, and faulty verb patterns recur.
Write complete sentences and review article use, relative clauses, and verb complements before adding further structural complexity.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?
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