Nowadays, international tourism is the biggest industry in the world. Unfortunately, international tourism creates tension rather than understanding between people from different cultures. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Sample Response
When people discuss the impacts of international tourism, they have different opinions. Some people think that this harms international understandingthe international understanding, while others believe it is helpful in increasinghelpful to increase international understanding. In my view, there are many reasons to think that this will improve international understanding among people from different culturesin the peoples’ different cultures. First of all, it helps to spread culturehelps in spreading of culture. In the world, every country has its own distinct society and culturecultures. For example, an Italian person can better understand Asian peoplethe Asians by visiting an Asian nation and coming to understandby visiting any Asian nation and come to know how young people respect their elders in their society. Good cultural values which are absent from one's own society can be adoptedadapted from other societies. Moreover, internationalInternational tourism aids in learning foreign languages. Learning a new languageLearning new language enrichesenrich one's knowledge and experience. I am an Indian student and want to be admitted to a PhD course at Harvard Universityget admitted to Harvard University in PhD. Course. Thus I’ll have to enrol in English language courses with my studies. This will be a valuable experienceThis will a valuable experience and will provide me with opportunitiesprovide me chances to learn a new language and the culture and history associated with ita new language and thus the cultures and history associated with it. Finally, Tourism provides first-hand experiencethe real experience of things and historyHistory. We have seen many things on television, the internet and in moviesin TV, internet and movies, but a visit to that place brings us closer to itmakes us closer to that thing. I have seen zebras in Discovery Channel videosZebras in discovery channel videos and would like to visit the central African forest reserve to examine and discover more about this animal. Through a person can get the practical reality and this will possible with the help of African peoples and their government. To sum up, it is clear that tourism is important to people of different cultures. The above discussion shows that it not only provides one with the opportunity to know about other cultures, languages, history but also enhance the possibility to learn and experience the first-hand experience many realities.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response maintains a clear view that international tourism can improve cross-cultural understanding and offers several relevant benefits. Its main limitation is that some supporting examples, particularly the Harvard study and wildlife discussion, connect only loosely to tourism or intercultural understanding, while frequent grammatical errors reduce precision. The highest priority is to develop fewer, directly relevant examples and explain clearly how each tourist experience reduces cultural tension.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response presents a clear position and several relevant reasons, although some examples are only loosely connected to intercultural understanding.
Develop each main reason with a directly relevant tourism example and explicitly explain how it reduces tension between cultures.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ideas progress in a recognizable sequence from the position through three reasons to a conclusion, though linking is sometimes mechanical and paragraphing is limited.
Separate the main reasons into clear body paragraphs and use referencing to connect explanations smoothly within each paragraph.
Lexical Resource
The response uses an adequate range of vocabulary for culture, language, and experience, but inaccurate collocations and word choices recur.
Prioritize natural combinations such as learn about a culture and gain firsthand experience, checking that each selected word fits its context.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of sentence forms is attempted, but frequent errors in articles, agreement, verb forms, and clause construction reduce accuracy.
Edit each sentence for complete clause structure and subject-verb agreement before adding more complex grammatical patterns.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Nowadays, international tourism is the biggest industry in the world. Unfortunately, international tourism creates tension rather than understanding between people from different cultures. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
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