Today more people are travelling than ever before. Why is this the case? What are the benefits of travelling for the traveller?
Sample Response
In the past animals were being used to travel which made the whole process quite difficult. However, at present, the majorityat present majority of the individuals are travelling because of the updated facilitiesnew updated facilities being provided which have made transportwhich made transport quite convenient and at the same time they have also provided affordable packagesit provided an affordable package as well. In addition, people also benefitthe population is also being benefited as methods of travel arethe method of travelling are rapidly developing and becoming more comfortablebeing rapidly developed and comfortable along with the attractiveattracted packages providing them with an opportunity to discover a new place and interact with individuals with completely different traditionsan individual with completely different tradition and along with that they can also travel on cheaper flightsenjoy tourism with cheaper flights as many affordable packages are currently present. To commence with, as with the development in technology made life much more easier than before, there is also a huge impact of it on transport as the population with average salary are given cheaper packages in order to enjoy their journey with their family. Similarly workers in most fieldsthe workers in most of the field are given opportunitiesbeing provided with a chance to travel abroad in order to represent their companies, which is quite beneficial to them professionally and personallyhelpful for them professionally and personally. Furthermore, there are many advantages of travelling; for example,advantages of travelling like an individual can learn a foreign language, interact with other people of different cultures and traditionstradition.DeleteMoreover, they can practice a foreign language and experience a totally different journey along with that they will also be ablethey willbe also able to discover a new place To conclude, though only a few used to travel in the past due to fewerless services being provided to them but recently a huge number of individuals are ready to go to a new place and travel for long hours in order to reach their desired goals
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response addresses both questions and offers several relevant reasons and benefits, with affordability and cultural contact emerging as its clearest ideas. Its main limitation is that these points are repeated or listed rather than developed, while very long sentences and missing paragraphing weaken clarity. The highest priority is to organise one developed paragraph for each question, using precise explanations and shorter, accurately punctuated sentences.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Both questions are addressed with relevant ideas about easier transport, lower costs, work travel, and cultural learning, but support is brief and repetitive.
Develop one distinct reason for increased travel and one traveller benefit with a clear explanation and specific example.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response has a recognisable introduction, sequence of ideas, and conclusion, but it is presented as one long paragraph with strained progression.
Divide the response into purposeful paragraphs and use shorter sentences with clearer links between each main idea.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary covers the topic adequately, but repeated wording and inaccurate combinations such as descriptions of packages and facilities reduce precision.
Replace repeated general terms with precise travel vocabulary and check word forms, plurals, and natural collocations.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response attempts complex structures, but frequent agreement, article, comparison, punctuation, and sentence-boundary errors sometimes hinder reading.
Prioritise complete, controlled sentences and proofread subject-verb agreement, articles, comparative forms, and punctuation.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Today more people are travelling than ever before. Why is this the case? What are the benefits of travelling for the traveller?
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