In some countries today, there is an attitude that ‘anyone can do it’ in the arts – music, literature, acting, art, etc. As a result, people with no talent become rich and famous and genuine talent is not valued or appreciated. Do you agree or disagree?
Sample Response
It is true that natural talents or skills can probably guaranteeprobably can guarantee people’s future careersthe future career of people especially in music, entertainment industries, literature etc. However, some people believe that they probably can be successful without having a skill or certain talent. I personally agreeagree to say that people might achieve their goals of life without having a talent for several reasonsin terms of several reasons.
The first reason is that talent alone cannot guarantee someone’s successit is not talent that can guarantee someone’s success particularly in entertainment industries but the major factor is popularitythe major factor is all about popularity. The popularity can be gained by doing such unusual action that may attract people’s attention loving to see or enjoy it. For example, there are some artists or actors are hired by the film production not because of their talents, moreover, it goes to the unique character of those persons that enable them playing comedian film.
The second reason is that networkingthe point of networking plays a very important roleplays very important role in advancingsucceeding someone’s career in the entertainment industry or the artsin entertainment industry or arts. Through personal networksBy having networks, we can easily get a job even though we do not have natural or genuine talents because employers will recruit people whom they know wellpeople will recruit people who they know well because they value relationships and friendshipsby considering relationship and friendship values. For example, there are so many people holding strategic positionssitting on the strategic position in a company because they have a closer relationship with the boss or managers.
However, it is true that talented and skilled people probably tend to work professionally but talents and skills can be replaced by popularity and networks which lead them to have a job sooner and the professionalism will be gained during the experience in working or can be possessed through training provided by those companies.
In short, popularity and networks tend to give people wider opportunitiesbring people having a wide opportunity in the job market and I believe that these factorsthose kinds of things probably compensate for a lack of talent or skillreplace the existence of talents or skills as well as lead them to prosperous and successful livesbring them to the prosperous and successful life.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response’s clearest strength is its consistent explanation that popularity and personal networks can enable success without exceptional talent, with a logical paragraph structure and relevant supporting examples. Its main limitation is incomplete task coverage, since it barely examines the claim that genuine talent is consequently undervalued, while some examples extend beyond the arts. The highest priority is to address that consequence directly and support it with precise arts-related evidence.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response presents a clear viewpoint and develops two relevant causes of success without talent, but it does not fully address the devaluation of genuine talent.
Explain how popularity or networking specifically causes talented artists to receive less recognition, using an example drawn directly from the arts.
Coherence and Cohesion
Paragraphing and overall progression are clear, though some linking is mechanical and the long fourth paragraph compresses several relationships.
Give the concession a clearer internal sequence and use fewer formulaic transitions so each logical step follows naturally.
Lexical Resource
There is a reasonable range of topic vocabulary, but frequent awkward collocations and inaccurate word choices limit clarity and precision.
Use more natural combinations such as build a career, leading position, and gain professional experience, while removing vague repeated wording.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response uses varied complex structures, but recurring errors with articles, relative clauses, verb patterns, and sentence boundaries weaken accuracy.
Revise complex sentences into well-controlled clauses, checking articles and verb patterns such as enable someone to do something.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
In some countries today, there is an attitude that ‘anyone can do it’ in the arts – music, literature, acting, art, etc. As a result, people with no talent become rich and famous and genuine talent is not valued or appreciated. Do you agree or disagree?
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