Young people in the modern world seem to have more power and influence than any previous young generation. Why is this the case? What impact does this have on the relationship between old and young people?
Sample Response
Irrespective of nationality, location or religion, in the pastback in time, older peoplethe old ones were considered the foundation of societybase of the society. No doubt, nowadays, the roles have reversedexchanged, with the young people becoming more and more powerful and influential.
To begin with, one of the reasons this phenomenon has emergedthis phenomenon took place is the increasing competitiveness of the modern world. Current expectationsThe recent criteria are increasingly demandingtougher and tougher, which means that people must devote more timemore allotted time by humans is required. While young people tend to invest a lot of their time in things such as academics or work, older people usually have a familyhave usually a family and more responsibilities to managemore affairs to deal with. Thus, the productivityThus the productivity of young people is higher, resulting in a more involved and influential generationmore implicated and influent generation.
Secondly, the modern environment is constantly changingin continuous change, which means that people nowadays must adapt more quickly and effectivelyadapt quicker and better. As an example, take the emphasis placed onthe accent which is put on multidisciplinarymulti-disciplinary, lifelong training, or the fact that students are prepared for jobs that do not yet existdo not merely exist yet. All these are supported better by younger people, and the invaluable proof is, for example, the shrewdness with which a child learns how to work on a computer, an action almost impossible for some adults. Considering these ability to adaptabilities of adoption, it becomes obvious why young people tend to occupy more and more important positionsplaces in society.
Conversely, the young generation may become disrespectful to adults, on the basis of their achievements. Young people in particularThe youngster especially may consider that they do not have anything to learn from older people, resulting in a continuing intellectual declinecontinuous intellectual falling.
Overall, the adaptation capacities alongside with the fact that young people have more time to spend are the main reasons for young people’s poweryoungers' power. The consequence may be, unfortunately, quite bad.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response’s strongest feature is its clear progression through two plausible reasons, supported by relevant discussion of adaptability and productivity. Its main limitation is the very brief treatment of the effect on intergenerational relationships, while frequent awkward word choices reduce precision; the highest priority is to develop that second part with a fuller causal explanation and a specific example.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Both questions are addressed, and the reasons are developed more fully than the limited discussion of the impact on relationships.
Develop the intergenerational impact through a clear causal chain and a concrete example rather than one brief assertion.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ideas progress logically through focused paragraphs, with generally effective linking despite some mechanical transitions.
Use less formulaic signposting and make the shift from causes to consequences more explicitly connected.
Lexical Resource
The response shows a good range of topic vocabulary, but frequent inaccurate collocations and word choices reduce precision.
Prioritize natural collocations, replacing awkward expressions with precise terms such as influence, adaptation, and generational decline.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A variety of complex sentence forms is used, though recurring article, agreement, and word-form errors remain noticeable.
Proofread complex sentences for articles, noun forms, and agreement so that grammatical control is more consistent.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Young people in the modern world seem to have more power and influence than any previous young generation. Why is this the case? What impact does this have on the relationship between old and young people?
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