The graph shows Underground Station passenger numbers in London.
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Sample Response
The graph provides a visual representation of the number of passengers in London's Underground stationsstation from 6:00 in the early morning to 22:00 at night.
Overall, the early morning and late afternoon recorded the highest numbers of passengers, followed by moderate levels in the middle of the dayearly afternoon. In contrast, late evening hours saw a significant drop in passenger numbers.
From 6:00 to 8:00, passenger traffic rose steeply from 100 to reach the day's peak of 400, before dropping sharply from 300 at 9:00 to around 180 by 10:00. Between 10:00 and 11:00Over the next hour, the number of passengers increased slightly to approximately 200.
Between 11:00 and 12:00, the number rose markedly to nearly 280 commutersindividuals, before reaching 300 passengers at 14:00. Passenger traffic then recorded a major drop to fewer than 100 passengersmajor drop to 100 passengers by 16:00, the same figure reported at 6:00. The number increased to approximately 380 passengers at 18:00. By 20:00, the figure dropped to nearly 120 passengers. Between 20:00 and 22:00 it fluctuated slightly from nearly 120 to 160, before dropping to approximately 140roughly 140 passengers at the end of the day.
Why this response received Band 8.0
The report effectively describes the key trends and data points of the line graph with high accuracy and clear structure. The main strength is its logical chronological organisation paired with precise data reporting and appropriate vocabulary. To improve further, the overview could explicitly highlight the specific rush-hour peak times at 8:00 and 18:00 rather than using broader time periods.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
Key features and numerical data are accurately identified and reported across the entire timeframe, supported by a clear overview.
Make the overview even sharper by explicitly mentioning the exact morning and evening peak times.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information is organized logically in a chronological flow with clear paragraphing and smooth transitional phrases.
Vary cohesive devices slightly more to connect distinct data points without relying primarily on time-based transitions.
Lexical Resource
A good variety of vocabulary for describing trends and values is used accurately throughout the text.
Incorporate a wider range of precise noun phrases to describe passenger volume fluctuations.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Grammar and sentence structures are varied and accurate, with very few minor errors.
Combine data reporting clauses using complex conditional or participial structures to increase grammatical variety.