The chart and table below show the results of a survey of library users at a university.
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Sample Response
The pie chart and table illustrate the categories and levels of user satisfactionsatisfaction of library users at a university.
Overall, the majority of library users at this university included full-time undergraduatesundergraduate and postgraduates, while the highest rate of user satisfaction was recorded for the helpfulness of stafflargest proportion of library user satisfaction was that of staff's helpfulness. DeleteAccording to the pie chart, full-time undergraduates accounted for the highest proportion of the total library users, at 44%, followed by full-time postgraduates, at 25%. Part-time postgraduates represented a smaller sharepostgraduate represented smaller share of the total, at 16%, double the proportion of distance learnerstwo times three percentage of the distance learning (8%), which was slightly higher than the figure for academic staffwhich was slightly higher than academic staff, at 7%.
As for the satisfaction of the people who utilized the library, figures show different patternspattens. Most users were satisfied with the helpfulness of the staffworkers' services, at 95%, while the lowest rate of user satisfaction was for the availability of journals, with 45% being very satisfiedmost were dissatisfied with journal's availability, at 45%. Among five library services surveyedtypes of library user satisfaction, zero respondents reported being dissatisfied withnobody had dissatisfaction with the opening hours and the helpfulness of staff , while the remaining three types all, to some extent, generated some dissatisfactionfailed to meet users' needs, for they took up shares of the total, in terms of being not satisfied, with books' availability accounting for 10%, journalsjournal making up 20%, and the reliability of wi-fi at 19%wi-fi's reliability 19% respectively.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response successfully presents a clear overall trend and covers data from both the pie chart and the table. However, there is a prominent data inaccuracy in describing user dissatisfaction levels, alongside several mechanical phrasing errors. Priority should be given to double-checking key figures against the visual prompt and refining sentence structure for clarity.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response provides a clear overview and reports key data, but misinterprets the 45% figure for journal availability as dissatisfaction rather than high satisfaction.
Cross-check key data points directly against table headings to ensure reported percentages match the correct columns.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information is organized logically into distinct paragraphs for each visual, though cohesive phrases are occasionally clumsy or overcomplicated.
Use clearer transition phrases and avoid convoluted expressions when making numerical comparisons.
Lexical Resource
An adequate vocabulary range is demonstrated with terms like 'utilized' and 'proportion', though some word choices and spelling lapses appear awkward.
Focus on accurate collocations and word forms when presenting data comparisons and reporting survey results.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex sentence structures is used, but grammatical errors and missing articles occasionally disrupt the flow.
Ensure proper article usage before singular countable nouns and double-check complex clauses for grammatical completeness.