The chart and table below show the results of a survey of library users at a university.
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The pie chart provides a breakdown of different categories of library users, while the table shows their satisfaction levels based on the range of servicesvariation of opportunities the library provided.
Overall, a substantialsubstation portion of the chart is dedicated to full-time undergraduates, exactlyapproximately 44%, which is then followed by full-time postgraduates with 25%. A small fraction is attributed to part-time postgraduatesgraduates, accounting for 16%about 16% out of 100 , and lastly, the lowest percentageand lastly the lowest percentage, 7% and 8% respectivelyroughly 7-8% is accounted for by academic staffis accounted for academic staff and distance learners from all the available courses.
As for the table, users reported the highest satisfaction withat the helpfulness of the library staff, roughly 95%, and only 5 % were fairly satisfied with staff helpfulnessfelt slightly unsure about staff's usefulness. Also, the table shows that 65%the 65% of the users were very satisfied with opening hoursfelt satisfied with opening hours, while only 35% felt fairly satisfied with it. In addition, half of the individuals felt content about the availability of books, with 40% accounted for by userswith 40% accounted for users who were fairly satisfied. This contrasts with the other 10%This contrast with other 10%, which showed a strong dissatisfaction with this servicetopic. Lastly,And lastly, less than half of the users were satisfied with the availability of journals and the reliability of wi-fi, less than 40% was fairly satisfied and roughly 20% showed strong dissatisfaction toward these particular services offered by the libraryoffered by library.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The essay successfully reports key data from both visual elements and presents a logical, three-paragraph structure. However, it lacks a true high-level overview sentence that synthesizes overall findings across both the chart and table. To improve, write a clear summary paragraph highlighting overall trends and refine grammatical precision regarding articles and subject-verb agreement.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response presents key features from both the chart and table, though the overall paragraph functions as specific data reporting rather than a synthesis of major trends.
Include a clear overview paragraph that summarizes overarching patterns across both sources without relying solely on detailed figures.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information is organized logically by visual source, making the essay generally clear to follow.
Use logical linkers and transition phrases to connect contrasting points more naturally between paragraphs.
Lexical Resource
A adequate range of vocabulary is used to describe percentages and satisfaction levels, despite occasional word-choice inaccuracies.
Focus on precise lexical choices and correct terms from the prompt, such as using 'substantial' instead of 'substation'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex sentence structures is attempted, though minor grammatical errors occur frequently.
Review subject-verb agreement and article usage to eliminate recurring grammatical lapses throughout descriptions.