Access to clean water is a basic human right. Therefore every home should have a water supply that is provided free of charge. Do you agree or disagree?

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Sample Response

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AccessAccessibility to clean water is a basic human righta human's basic right. Nowadays, some people argue that every home should acquire a free water supplyfree water supply without any charge. From my perspective, I disagree with this opinion, because an unrestricted free water supplylimitless free water will give rise to water shortage and environmental pollution. If people can get access to clean water without any cost, they will gradually take it for granted, leading to the excessive water consumptionabuse of water supply. The overuse, in turn, may dry out the clean water resourcesresource and cause water shortage. Moreover, there is also an unbearable burden on wastewater treatment systemsdirty water process system, which may result in system breakdownsdisorganization and give rise to environmental pollution. Worse still, free water supply may harm the management of water nationally. Given the unevendifferent distribution of water resources, the government must manage and allocate water resources carefullymake precise organization of the water. If the domestic water consumption surgeswater for homes ascend dramatically, the water for industry and other sectorsindustry an so on will also be greatly influenced, causing great damage toon the whole society. Admittedly, providing cheaper water supply for every home is reasonable, but we cannot rush down the conclusion to provide free water supply. Instead, the government can levy targeted taxesmake precise tax on homes with different financial situationssituation and help the homes that really need water aid. In a nutshell we should give some homeshome with poor finance cheaper water supply to relieve their burden, but that doesn't mean we should lift all restrictionswiden the limitation and cut down the cost of water usage. That is for the sake of the long-term security of societyoverall humanity's safety and right to access clean water.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 6.0

文章清晰地表达了反对向所有家庭免费供水立场,并从资源浪费、国家调度以及替代方案等角度展开了讨论。主要不足在于部分段落的论证逻辑不够深入,且存在若干词汇搭配不当和语法小错误。建议进一步细化论据支持,并加强对高级句型和地道词汇搭配的精准度控制。

Band score breakdown

IELTS Writing Criteria Scores

TR

任务回应

6.0
Scoring rule

立场明确且直接回应了题目要求,提出的主要观点与论题密切相关。

Next step

可以通过补充具体的因果链条或现实例证,进一步充实对“工业用水受影响”等观点的具体论证。

CC

连贯与衔接

6.0
Scoring rule

文章结构完整,段落划分合理,整体行文逻辑推进基本顺畅。

Next step

尝试使用更加多样化且自然的衔接词,避免如 "Worse still" 等过度依赖或略显机械的连接方式。

LR

词汇资源

6.0
Scoring rule

能够使用与话题相关的词汇来表达观点,整体语义表达较为清晰。

Next step

注意地道词汇搭配,修正如 "make precise organization" 或 "rush down the conclusion" 等不自然的表达。

GRA

语法多样性与准确性

6.0
Scoring rule

使用了多种句式结构,多数句子能够传达明确的意思。

Next step

仔细检查拼写与冠词、介词的搭配,减少如 "an so on" 以及单复数一致性方面的低级错误。

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IELTS Writing Task 2

Access to clean water is a basic human right. Therefore every home should have a water supply that is provided free of charge. Do you agree or disagree?

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