People succeed because of their hard work; luck has nothing to do with success. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Sample Response
Many people think that to be successful someone should rely on working hard and luck has no role in success. I completely disagree with this notion that success only depends on hard work. In my view, the importance of luck should not be ignored to be successful.
Firstly, Lucky people have more advantages than unlucky people. For example, in IELTS exam, to be lucky it is very important to manage to get a high score because you confront a lot of topics in the exam and if you are lucky, the topics may not be tough for you because of your knowledge about them. In the speaking test, you must opt to cue card that is a vital part of your score. If you are not familiar with the topic in the cue card which you choose, you could not achieve to get a high score in the exam even if you study hard and learn a lot of vocabularies. On the other hand, if you know a variety of vocabulary about the topic that you choose, you can get a high score and pass the exam even maybe this is the best score you have ever got. Therefore, to be lucky sometimes is as important as to be hard-working.
Secondly, Luck is essential to be successful in the professional life. For instance, one of my friends, his name is Mehmet, is a kind, smart, and hard-working person, but he is still in the same position since he began to work. However, one of our mutual friend, his name is Ali, is also hard-working but at the same time, he is an amazingly lucky person because he embarked on working the same position in the same company. However, because of having one more certificate than Mehmet, he was promoted to the director post. As a result, he earns a higher salary than Mehmet.
In conclusion, In my opinion, success not only rely on hard work but also rely on to be luck. Thus, lucky people have always advantages to accomplish what they want compared to the unlucky people.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Capitalisation Original: Firstly, Lucky people Suggested revision: Firstly, lucky people Why it matters: Do not capitalise lucky after a comma unless it begins a proper noun.
- 2. Missing article Original: in IELTS exam Suggested revision: in the IELTS exam Why it matters: A specific exam name needs the article in this phrase.
- 3. Unclear phrasing Original: to be lucky it is very important to manage Suggested revision: luck can help candidates Why it matters: The original phrase is awkward and does not clearly express the point.
- 4. Word choice Original: you confront a lot of topics Suggested revision: you may face many topics Why it matters: Face topics is more natural than confront topics in exam writing.
- 5. Wrong verb pattern Original: opt to cue card Suggested revision: choose a cue card Why it matters: Choose is the correct verb here, and a cue card needs an article.
- 6. Tense consistency Original: which you choose Suggested revision: that you have chosen Why it matters: This better fits the exam situation being described.
- 7. Verb pattern Original: you could not achieve to get Suggested revision: you may not achieve Why it matters: Achieve is not followed by to get in this way.
- 8. Uncountable noun Original: a lot of vocabularies Suggested revision: a lot of vocabulary Why it matters: Vocabulary is normally uncountable.
- 9. Awkward sequence Original: even maybe this is the best score Suggested revision: and this may even be the best score Why it matters: The adverbs need a clearer order.
- 10. Article use Original: the professional life Suggested revision: professional life Why it matters: No article is needed when referring to professional life generally.
- 11. Appositive structure Original: one of my friends, his name is Mehmet, is Suggested revision: one of my friends, Mehmet, is Why it matters: The phrase his name is interrupts the grammar unnecessarily.
- 12. Plural noun Original: one of our mutual friend Suggested revision: one of our mutual friends Why it matters: After one of, use a plural noun.
Suggested Rewrites
- Firstly, Lucky people Firstly, lucky people
- in IELTS exam in the IELTS exam
- to be lucky it is very important to manage luck can help candidates
- you confront a lot of topics you may face many topics
- opt to cue card choose a cue card
- which you choose that you have chosen
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Detailed feedback by IELTS writing criterion after the annotated essay.
Task Response
The essay gives a clear disagreement and uses examples to argue that luck matters, but the IELTS example is narrow and the work example is not fully explained as luck rather than qualification.
Define luck as opportunity, timing, or background, then connect each example directly to how it affects success.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction, two body paragraphs, and conclusion, though several sentences are repetitive and some contrasting links are not accurate.
Use topic sentences that name the exact reason and avoid repeated however links within the same example.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is sufficient for the topic, but word choice is sometimes unnatural, with phrases such as opt to cue card, achieve to get, and to be luck.
Replace awkward phrases with formal collocations such as favourable circumstances, opportunity, preparation, promotion, and career success.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Meaning is mostly clear, but errors in articles, verb patterns, plurals, and sentence structure occur regularly.
Check verb patterns after manage, choose, depend, and rely, and use plural nouns for general ideas.