The diagram below shows the steps in the hiring process at ACME corporation.
Sample Response
The process diagram shows different stages of ACME corporation's recruitment process, commencing from application submission by the prospective candidates, which ends by either offering a permanent position in the company or denying any position at all. As shownAs is presented, initially candidates are invited to submit their applications to be considered for jobs at ACME Corporationfor the jobs in ACME corporation. Those who apply for a job at this companyapply to this company for a job have to attend an initial qualification interview. The companyauthority dividesdistinguishes the candidates who have completedfaced the interview intoin two categories - 'meet the basic qualificationsqualification' and 'do not meet the basic qualificationsqualification'. The applicants inof the latter category are disqualified while the candidates who meet the qualifications proceed to further testingare further tested. In the next step, the qualifiedqualifying applicants take an aptitude test, based on which they are either recorded as having failed or passedmarked as failed or passed. Failed candidates are excluded fromleft out from the recruitment process while the successful applicants are offered a position on a six-monthmoth probation who are evaluated after the probation period. At this stage, a recommendation is madea recommendation made either to dismiss those probationary employeesdiscard those temporary employees or to offer them permanent positions in the company.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The report gives a clear overview and accurately traces every main branch from application and interview through aptitude testing, probation, evaluation, and either permanent employment or rejection. Its strongest feature is complete process coverage in a concise sequence, while the main limitation is grammatical control in several long passive sentences. The highest priority is to divide the description into clearer stages and correct clause boundaries, verb forms, and modifiers.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response accurately covers the complete process, including both rejection points, probation, evaluation, and the final employment decision.
State explicitly in the overview that applicants can be rejected at three decision points before or after probation.
Coherence and Cohesion
The stages follow the diagram in a clear logical order, though one-block presentation and long final sentences make the branching structure harder to scan.
Use one paragraph for application through aptitude testing and another for probation, evaluation, and final outcomes.
Lexical Resource
A good range of appropriate process vocabulary describes selection and outcomes, with a few awkward or inaccurate combinations.
Use divided into two categories, excluded from the process, placed on probation, and a recommendation is made.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Varied passive and complex structures are attempted successfully overall, but missing verbs, faulty relative clauses, and modifier errors recur.
Simplify the final sequence into complete sentences and correct six-month probation and a recommendation is made.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The diagram below shows the steps in the hiring process at ACME corporation.
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