The charts below show the results of a survey of adult education. The first chart shows the reasons why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the costs of adult education should be shared.
Sample Response
The bar chart depicts why adults chose to study and the pie chart shows people's opinionsthe people's opinion about the sharing of adult-education costscost distribution of this adult study. Overall it is evident that the most motivating factor for study among adults is due to their keen interest in the subject and the greatest proportion of the cost of study must be borne by the individual and the least must be borne by the taxpayer, according to people's opinion. Having an interest in the subject is a crucial factor that inspires adults to pursue further studyfurther pursue their academic studies. This is shown by the fact that 40 percent of them selected this reasonopt for this single reason. Similarly, the desireeven the zeal to gain qualificationshigher qualifications persuades 38 percent of adults to continue studyingchoose to advance their level of study. On the other hand, reasons like a support for their incumbent job, building certainty in promotions and study as a leisure activity quite indulges adults to study. These are evident at 22 percent, 20 percent and 20 percent respectively chose to study for these reasons. A smaller group of 12 percent studiedA small group of 12 percent focus on studying to be able to change jobsswitch their jobs. However, the least motivating factor to study is meeting people, at only 9 percentto make new acquaintances, only 9 percent. In addition to the aboveIn addition to above, respondents thought thatpeople opine that 40 percent of adult-education costs40 percent of the adult education cost should be paid by individualsthemselves. On the other hand, employers and taxpayers have a smaller sharescomparatively lower share, Deletein their opinion, at 35 percent and 25 percent respectively.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response accurately covers every reason for study and all three proposed cost shares, with a clear overview highlighting the largest and smallest categories. Its main limitation is uneven language control: several awkward collocations and grammatical constructions reduce fluency, while the single-block organisation weakens presentation. Prioritise dividing the report into logical paragraphs and expressing comparisons with more natural, grammatically complete sentences.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response presents a clear overview and accurately reports all categories and percentages from both charts.
Refine the analysis by grouping and comparing the middle-ranking reasons more directly rather than listing them sequentially.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information follows a logical order and cohesive markers guide the reader, but the entire report is presented as one dense paragraph.
Separate the overview, reasons for study, and cost-sharing data into distinct paragraphs with clear internal grouping.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary is varied and generally conveys the data clearly, although several expressions are unnatural or imprecise.
Replace awkward wording such as "quite indulges adults" and "building certainty in promotions" with conventional comparative language.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response uses both simple and complex structures, but recurring agreement, article, and sentence-construction errors remain noticeable.
Rewrite incomplete or tangled comparisons as full clauses and check agreement between plural reasons, percentages, and their verbs.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The charts below show the results of a survey of adult education. The first chart shows the reasons why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the costs of adult education should be shared.
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