The graph below shows the number of books read by men and women at Burnaby Public Library from 2011 to 2014.
Sample Response
The line graph presents data on the number of books read by men and women at the Burnaby Public Librarythe Burnaby public library from 2011 to 2014.
Overall, women initiallyOverall, initially women readers read more books and showed more interests in reading at Burnaby Public Library but later in the periodat the later period, men read more booksmale readers showed more interests in reading books whereas the figure for women declinedwhile that was the opposite in the case of the women readers.
In the beginning, during 2011, more books were read by women readers, i.e. 5,500 than men readers, i.e. 2500 respectively in this library. Over the next two yearsIn the following two years, there was a surge in the number of books readenjoyed by both sexes. However, while there was a steady rise in the number of books read by womena slight rise for the book read by women, the figure for menthat by men, in contraston the contrary, rose sharplyrose at a significant pace during this period. In 2013, the number of books read by both men and womenboth male and female convergedmet at an equidistant point where both men and women read aroundhad read at around 10,000 books. In 2014But in 2014, the graph showswe found contrasting trendsan opposite reaction towards reading by both men and women. On one side, men reached a peak at around 14000 book reads by them, women readers, on the other side, read a significantly fewer number of books, seven thousand only.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The report captures the central crossover in 2013 and the contrasting final directions, while organising the account in a broadly logical sequence. However, the opening values are inaccurate, the 2012 figures are omitted, and several awkward expressions make otherwise clear comparisons less precise. Prioritise checking every plotted value and describing each trend with natural, economical language.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The overview identifies the main trends and crossover, but inaccurate 2011 values and omission of the 2012 figures reduce precision and coverage.
Report the correct starting figures of 3,000 for men and 5,000 for women and include the distinct 2012 values.
Coherence and Cohesion
The introduction, overview, and details progress logically, though some linking expressions are overloaded or awkwardly combined.
Use simpler contrast links and group the two series consistently by year or by gender.
Lexical Resource
There is adequate trend vocabulary, but frequent unnatural phrases such as more interests, equidistant point, and book reads reduce precision.
Prefer standard graph language such as showed greater interest, reached the same figure, and books read.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response attempts varied complex sentences, but agreement, plural, article, and comparison errors recur despite meaning remaining clear.
Check noun forms and comparison clauses carefully, especially interests, books read, and sentences contrasting the two groups.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The graph below shows the number of books read by men and women at Burnaby Public Library from 2011 to 2014.
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