The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004.
Sample Response
The given line graph compares the consumption of fish and meatfish and meat consumptions by people inby the people of a European country from 1979 to 2004. As shownAs is presented in the graph, the consumption of chicken increased over time while the three types of meatmeats of different types were preferredmore preferred by people in the countrygiven European country than fishthe fishes. According to the graph, more than 200 grammes of beef was consumed per person per weekdaily by each person initially in 1979. That year, eachIn this year, each person on averageon an average ate 150 grammes of chicken and lamb, whilelambs while fishthe consumption was just over 50 grammes in this year. Over time, peopleOver time people preferred chicken and the consumption continued to increasekept on increasing and reached 250 grammes per person per weekreached to over 250 grammes per day by each person. The consumption of beef, lamb decreased over time and finally, in 2004, the average consumption of these two meat types decreased to around 100 grammes per person in a day. The consumption of fish remained almost unchanged throughout the periodfish consumption remained almost the same throughout the years and slightly decreased over time.
In summary, people started consuming more chicken than beef and lamb and the fish consumption remained almost the same.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response’s strongest feature is its clear identification of chicken’s rise, the decline in beef and lamb, and the relative stability of fish. However, the repeated use of daily rather than weekly units and the inaccurate grouping of beef and lamb at about 100 grams weaken data accuracy; prioritize preserving the chart’s units and distinguishing each series’ 2004 endpoint.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The overview identifies the major trends, but the unit is repeatedly misstated and some final values are inaccurately combined.
Report grams per person per week and distinguish the 2004 figures of about 110 grams for beef and 70 for lamb.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response follows a logical introduction-overview-detail sequence, though the final summary repeats rather than extends the earlier overview.
Use the final paragraph for a concise comparison of endpoints instead of restating the same trends.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary is adequate for describing change, but inaccurate plural forms and repetitive use of “consumption” limit flexibility and precision.
Use uncountable forms such as “meat,” “fish,” and “lamb,” and vary phrasing with “intake” or “amount consumed.”
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response uses both simple and complex structures, but agreement, article, preposition, and punctuation errors are noticeable throughout.
Check subject-verb agreement and remove unnecessary prepositions in forms such as “reached over 250 grams.”
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004.
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