The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004.
Sample Response
The line graph compares weekly consumption of four different foodseatables (i.e. beef, chicken, lamb and fish) in a European country from 1979 to 2004. Overall, it can be seen from the line graph that the consumption of meat and fish decreased during the 25-year periodduring the period of 25 years except for chickenwith the exception of chicken. In 1979It can be seen from the graph that in 1979, the consumption of beef was the highest at around 220 grams per person per week. Thereafter,After that, however, the consumption decreased gradually to nearly 170 grams in 1984 and rose again marginally by 1989rose again marginally in 1984, before falling dramatically to just above 100 grams in 2004. Similarly, lamblamb’s consumption decreased substantiallyslightly over the period of 25 years, decreasing from 150 grams to approximately 70 grams by 2004. By contrast, the consumption of chicken, which was 150 grams in 1979, increased steadily untiltill 1999, after which it rose significantly and reached a peak of 250 grams by 2004. MeanwhileBut, fish had the lowest consumptionremained unpopular throughout the period with a slightlittle decline of 10 grams from just over 60 gramsgram per person per weekper person intake. Deletegmail.com ]
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response is strongest in its clear overview and comprehensive coverage of all four food categories, using varied language to describe change. Its main limitation is occasional imprecision in the data and trend descriptions, including the repeated 1984 reference and understated falls for lamb and fish, while the single-paragraph format weakens presentation. The highest priority is to verify each key figure and divide the overview from the detailed comparisons.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response provides a clear overview and covers all four series with relevant figures, but several trend descriptions and data points are imprecise.
Verify dates and magnitudes carefully, especially the beef rebound and the larger overall declines in lamb and fish.
Coherence and Cohesion
The sequence from overview to individual categories is easy to follow and cohesive devices support comparisons, but all information is compressed into one paragraph.
Separate the introduction and overview from two grouped detail paragraphs so the main comparisons are more clearly signposted.
Lexical Resource
A good range of trend vocabulary is used with generally effective precision, despite a few awkward choices such as eatables and per person intake.
Use standard Task 1 terms such as food categories, consumption, and grams per person per week consistently.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Varied complex structures are mostly well controlled, with only occasional awkward phrasing, punctuation, and noun-phrase errors.
Refine the final fish sentence and check punctuation around linking words so that the remaining errors are consistently minor.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004.
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