The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities.
Sample Response
The mapsmap illustrates the changes on an island after the construction of some tourist facilities. Generally speaking, the island was deserted as no tourist facilitiesno tourists facility was there, but after the developmentrenovation, tourist amenities like the pier, restaurant, several accommodation unitsseveral accommodations, a reception buildingreception on the island, vehicle tracks and footpathsroads etc. made it tourist-friendlytourists friendly. The first map shows only a beach and some treesnothing on the island except some trees but the second map illustrates the changes after the construction of facilities. A pier where boats can dockfor the boats to land could be seen and from there, a The vehicle trackvehicle track leads to the reception area and then the restaurant. Vehicle track ends near the restaurant and the footpath allows tourists to walkleads tourists to the accommodation areas and to the beach. AccommodationResidential areas are located on both sides of the reception with a footpathwith footpath connecting them. It is worth noticing that no woodcutting took place as trees are present in both maps. On the left side of the reception, the residential area is connected to the beach via the footpath. Swimming is permittedSwimming facility is available there as well. To summarise, the map summarises that a deserted island had been turned into a tourist spot for the recreation and amusement of people without destroying natural beauty.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The report gives a clear overview and covers almost every major addition, including the pier, transport links, reception, restaurant, accommodation clusters and swimming beach. Its strongest feature is comprehensive spatial coverage, but recurring article, number and word-form errors weaken precision and the single-block presentation obscures structure; prioritise dividing the description into overview and detail paragraphs while correcting forms such as tourist facilities, tourist-friendly and a vehicle track.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response presents a clear transformation overview and accurately describes nearly all major facilities, routes and preserved natural features.
Make the spatial account even more precise by distinguishing the two accommodation clusters and avoiding unsupported wording such as no woodcutting took place.
Coherence and Cohesion
The description progresses logically from the overall change to transport, buildings and the beach, but the entire report forms one undivided paragraph.
Use separate paragraphs for the introduction and overview, western facilities, and central and eastern development.
Lexical Resource
A good range of map vocabulary conveys the changes clearly, though several collocations and forms such as tourists facility and accommodations are awkward.
Use precise forms and collocations such as tourist facilities, accommodation units, tourist-friendly and vehicle track.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response attempts varied complex structures, but errors with articles, plurals, possessives and noun modifiers recur throughout.
Proofread noun phrases systematically, especially a tourist facility, tourist-friendly, a vehicle track and footpaths connecting the units.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities.
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