The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities.
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Sample Response
The two maps present the development of an island, alongalongside with the new layoutnew special organisation after the constructionconstructions of some tourist facilities. Overall, the bare island has been developedrenovated to accommodate touristsfacilitate the tourists. It is easy to notice that two groups of accommodation hutstwo groups of cottages have been constructed in the centre and to the west of the island, providing accommodationserving as accommodations for tourists. Between them, a reception building was addeda reception appeared. Unlike the cottagesAs compared to the cottages, which were connected through footpaths, the reception has two vehiclevehicles tracks, one surrounding the reception and one runningfrom north to south. The developed island has a restaurantIt has a restaurant and at the southernsouth end, it has a piera specially designed Pier where boats come ashore. Finally, within 50 metres of the west cottages, the western beach has been designated for swimminga swimming area has been designed. A significant development could be observed on the island but the authority kept the palm trees as they were, which are spread across the islandwhich spread the whole island.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response identifies the central transformation and covers most major additions, including accommodation, reception, restaurant, pier, paths, and swimming access. Its main limitation is imprecision: the overview is rather general, the vehicle-track description is inaccurate, and the undeveloped eastern area is not clearly contrasted. Prioritise a sharper overview and precise spatial comparisons drawn directly from both maps.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
A clear overview and most key developments are included, although some spatial details and comparisons are imprecise or omitted.
Contrast the unchanged eastern area with the developed west and centre, and describe the single connected vehicle track accurately.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information progresses logically from the accommodation to central facilities and access, but the single paragraph and a few unclear references weaken organisation.
Separate the overview from the detailed description and use explicit nouns instead of ambiguous pronouns such as 'it'.
Lexical Resource
The response uses a sufficient range of map-related vocabulary, but several awkward collocations reduce precision.
Replace phrases such as 'special organisation', 'vehicles tracks', and 'facilitate the tourists' with natural, exact map-description language.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex structures communicates the main ideas, though errors with articles, plurals, prepositions, and modification recur.
Check noun phrases and agreement carefully, especially forms such as 'vehicle tracks', 'the construction', and references to the palm trees.