The graph shows Underground Station passenger numbers in London.
Sample Response
The provided graph depicts the number of people who use the London Underground station from 6:00 am to 10:00 pm on a typical day. It can be seen that the number of passengersusage of the station varies at different periods of the day but mostly it remains busy at 8.00 am and at 6.00 pm. At 6:00 am, the number of passengers at the station is very low with a total of 10090 passengers. However, it firmly increases up 200 to 7:00 am at which point the traffic witnesses a drastic plunge reaching the busiest point of the day with 400 passengers. Over the following two hoursIn a subsequent couple of hours, the passenger numbers fall sharplyrush relieves a little to reach 180 passengers at 10:00 am. The following two hours saw a moderate riseobserve a humble rise which eventually reached 280reached at 280 before creepingwhen it, thereafter, creep to 300 from 12:00 to 14:00. From 14:00From this moment, passenger numbers undergopassenger arrival faces a major decline to the daily low point of 100less than 100 at 16:00occurring at 16:00 while it rises sharplyplunges again to the second maximum of 380 at 18:00. FromFor 18:00 to 20:00, traffic falls sharplyeases a little bit to around 130 and finally the remain hours encountering little fluctuation at 150.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response identifies both rush-hour peaks and follows the daily sequence with many useful figures. Its main weakness is that inappropriate trend verbs repeatedly reverse the intended meaning, describing steep rises to 400 and 380 passengers as plunges, while several sentences are grammatically unstable. Prioritise accurate rise-and-fall vocabulary, then simplify the chronological sentences so every time, direction, and value is unambiguous.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The two main peaks, the afternoon low, and much of the daily pattern are selected, but contradictory trend descriptions and a few inaccurate figures reduce precision.
Report the movements explicitly as a surge to 400 at 8:00, a low of about 100 at 16:00, and another surge to 380 at 18:00.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response has a clear overview and broadly chronological progression, although long clauses and faulty links sometimes obscure the sequence.
Divide the details into morning and afternoon-evening paragraphs and give each major change its own concise sentence.
Lexical Resource
There is some range in language for movement, but frequent unsuitable collocations such as "firmly increases," "humble rise," and "plunges to the maximum" impair accuracy.
Use conventional graph verbs and adverbs, including "rose sharply," "increased gradually," "fell steeply," and "fluctuated slightly."
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Complex sentences are attempted, but recurring errors in tense, agreement, prepositions, and clause construction make several descriptions awkward.
Keep verbs in the past tense and revise forms such as "rose to 200," "then crept up to 300," and "the remaining hours fluctuated."
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The graph shows Underground Station passenger numbers in London.
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