The chart shows the number of mobile phones and landlines per 100 people in selected countries.
Sample Response
The supplied bar graph shows data on the number of mobile phones and landlines in seven countriesnumber of cell phone and land phone users in seven countries in Europein the Europe and North Americathe American regions. As is observed from the presentation, the number of landline users in Denmark, the US and CanadaDenmark, US and Canada isare higher than the number of cell phone users in these countries. By contrastOn the contrary, in Italy, Sweden, the UK and GermanySweden, Denmark and Germany the cell phone users are higher than the landline figureshigher in number than that of land phone users.
In Italy, Sweden, UK and Denmark almost 80 to 90 mobile phones per 100 people80-90 percent people use the cell phone. Among these sevensix countries, Italy has the highest mobile-phone figureItalian people are highest in percent in terms of cell phone usages whereas the highest landline figure is foundhighest percentages of land phone users are found in Denmark at almost 90 per 100 peoplewhich is almost 90%. The difference between cell phone and land phone users is highest in Italy and in Denmark. The lowest number of land phone users can be found in Canada. In summary, The two North American countries have more landlines than mobile phonesNorth America has more land phone users than their cell phone users and most European countries have more mobile phones than landlinesmost of the European people prefer to use mobile phones over land phones.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response identifies the broad continental pattern and includes several relevant comparisons, with a clear two-part structure. However, multiple key details are inaccurate: Denmark is placed in both comparison groups, Denmark is said to have one of the largest gaps, and Canada is wrongly identified as having the fewest landlines. Recheck each bar systematically before writing, then use precise comparative structures and correct agreement throughout.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The report identifies the broad regional pattern and some correct extremes, but several important country comparisons and rankings contradict the chart.
Create a country-by-country mobile-versus-landline table before drafting so Denmark, the largest gap, and the lowest landline figure are reported accurately.
Coherence and Cohesion
The introduction, broad comparison, details, and summary are recognisably sequenced, though internal contradictions and mechanical linking weaken coherence.
Group countries consistently by which phone type is higher and remove any country that conflicts with the stated comparison group.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is adequate for describing the chart, but repetition and awkward phrases such as highest in percent and cell phone usages limit precision.
Use concise comparative language such as had the highest mobile-phone figure, exceeded, and recorded the widest gap.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Meaning remains clear, but frequent errors in articles, agreement, plurals, and comparative structures reduce grammatical control.
Check every comparison for correct subject-verb agreement and use the pattern the figure for X was higher than that for Y.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The chart shows the number of mobile phones and landlines per 100 people in selected countries.
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