The line graph below shows the number of annual visits to Australia by overseas residents. The table below gives information on the country of origin where the visitors came from.
Sample Response
The given line graph and table providegive data on the number of overseas visitors travelling to Australia in millions of people from the year 1975 to 2005 and shows the number of travellers from 6 different parts of the world.
As is presented in the illustration, the number of visitors travelling to Australia roseraised steadily and the majority of these visitors came from Japan, South Korea and Europe. Almost 10 million people visited Australia in the year 1975 and this amount increased to over 15 million after 10 years. In the year 1995, total visitors travelled to Australiavisitor travelled Australia was approximately 24 million and finally reached well over 30 million in 2005finally in 2005 well over 30 million. The second table gives data on the number of visitors from 6 different regions who came to visit Australia in 2 different years with a 30-year intervalwith a 30 years interval. In both 1975 and 2005Both in 1975 and in 2005, Australia had the largest number of Japanese tourists followed by South Korea. In 2005, tourists from these 2 countries who came to visit Australia were about 20 million while 4.5 million tourists came from Europe and 1.1 million from the USAonly 1.1 million from the USA. The least number of tourists came to Australia during this period wereare from China which was only 0.3 million in 1975 and 0.8 million in 2005. The statistics of the table shows that total tourists visitingtotal tourist visited Australia from 6 different parts of the world increased significantly over 30 yearsin 300 years amounting well over 30 million in 200512005 compared to the total number of 8.8 million 30 years earlier.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The report provides a clear overview of the strong rise in visits and identifies Japan, South Korea, and Europe as the leading sources, supported by several relevant figures. Its main weakness is reduced precision, particularly the serious year and duration errors at the end, together with dense sentences and recurring language mistakes. Prioritise correcting every time and number reference, then separate the overall trend from the country comparison more clearly.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response identifies the upward trend in total visits and the main source countries, especially Japan, South Korea, and Europe. It includes several accurate figures, but the final sentence contains serious year and duration errors and some comparisons are imprecise.
Correct the ending to say the six listed regions rose from 8.8 million in 1975 to 30.4 million in 2005, a 30-year period.
Coherence and Cohesion
The report has a clear overview and moves from the line graph to the table, but it is written as two dense paragraphs with some overloaded sentences.
Use shorter sentences and separate the total-visit trend from the country-of-origin comparison.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is suitable for the task, but there are repeated forms such as travelling to Australia and several unnatural phrases.
Use overseas visitors, arrivals, came from, rose to, and accounted for to vary the report naturally.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response is generally understandable, but agreement, tense, article, and number errors occur regularly, including the severe 300 years and 12005 mistakes.
Proofread all time and number references, and revise subject-verb agreement in phrases such as visitors travelled and tourists came.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The line graph below shows the number of annual visits to Australia by overseas residents. The table below gives information on the country of origin where the visitors came from.
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