The line graph below shows the number of annual visits to Australia by overseas residents. The table below gives information on the country of origin where the visitors came from.
Sample Response
The provided graphs and the table show data on the number of overseas travellers who visited Australiathe number of overseas travellers visited Australia from the year 1975 till 2005 and their countries of origintheir origin where they came from. As is observed in the line graph, in 1975 8.8 million foreign travellers8.8 million of foreign travellers visited Australia and this number increased steadily each year. In 2005, the number of visitorsthis visitor’s number reached 30.4 millionreached to 30.4 million which is almost doublealmost double than the visitors’ number in 1985. The highest number of tourists came from Japan. In 1975, more than 3 million tourists came from Japan which is more than the total number of tourists who came from Europe, Britain, China and the USAthe total tourists came from Europe, Britain, China and USA. This number reached to 12 million in 2005 which contributed one-third of the total touriststourist of this year. The second largest tourists came to Australia from South Korea both in 1975 and in 2005. Visitors from China were the fewestThe Chinese tourist is the lowest in number among the 6 regions. In short, the number of total tourists who came to visit Australia increased steadily and the highest number of tourist came from Asia, specifically from Japan and South Korea.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response clearly identifies the sustained rise in overseas visits and the dominant contributions from Japan and South Korea, with an easy-to-follow progression from the graph to the table. Its main limitation is selective and sometimes imprecise comparison of the origin data, compounded by recurring grammatical and collocational errors; prioritise covering all countries systematically in separate paragraphs and use accurate expressions for visitor numbers and comparisons.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response captures the main upward trend in visits and identifies Japan and South Korea as major source countries. However, coverage of the table is selective, some comparisons are underdeveloped, and the country-origin figures are not always stated precisely.
Include a clearer comparison of all origin countries in 1975 and 2005, especially the growth in Europe and the smaller contributions from China and the USA.
Coherence and Cohesion
The report follows a sensible order from line graph to table and ends with a summary. It is readable, but it remains one paragraph and the table details could be grouped more clearly.
Use separate paragraphs for the overall visit trend and for the country-of-origin comparison.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is adequate for reporting trends and rankings, but there are repeated unnatural phrases such as visitors' number, tourists came, and origin where they came from.
Use more natural noun phrases such as visitor numbers, countries of origin, arrivals from Japan, and the total number of visitors.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
There are frequent errors with relative clauses, articles, singular/plural forms, and comparison structures. Meaning remains clear, but accuracy is uneven.
Revise noun phrases after number of, use who/that clauses carefully, and check plural forms such as tourists and visitors.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The line graph below shows the number of annual visits to Australia by overseas residents. The table below gives information on the country of origin where the visitors came from.
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