The graphs below show the Expenditure on Health & Education, UAE as percentages of GDP and Infant mortality and life expectancy.
Sample Response
The bar graph indicates the proportion of UAE government spending onexpenditure ratio of the UAE government in education and healthcare between 1985 and 1993, whereas the line graph compares life expectancy and the infant mortality ratelife expectancy and infant mortality rate in the UAE in 1970 with that of 1992. Overall, the UAE governmentUAE administrator spent a larger proportion of its GDPmore ratio of their budget on education than they did on health care. The improvement Emiratis achieved to prevent child death cases was remarkable. As the bar chart suggests, the UAE administration spent one-tenth of their GDP in the health sector in 1985 and their spending on public health was roughly 2% lower than that. Five years laterAfter 5 years, 14% of GDP went on education which was almost twicewhich was almost double than the expenditure on healthcareexpenditure in health division. Interestingly, the UAE governmentauthority spent a smaller proportion of its GDPspent less ratio of their GDP onin public health in 1990 than they did in 1985 but it went up to 10% in 1993. Education expenditureThe funds for education rose to nearly 15%went as high as nearly 15% in 1993. The line graph delineates that Emiratis’Emiratis people’s life expectancy was 60 years in 1970 and it increasedit was extended to just over 70 years after two decades. Infant mortality rate, on the other hand, was quite high in 1970 (70 infant deaths per thousand births70 child death in every thousand) and it fell significantly over 22 yearsit improved significantly during 22 years when it fell to 20 per thousand birthswent as low as 20 per thousand.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The report’s strongest feature is its broad coverage of both visuals, with a relevant overview and mostly accurate reporting of the principal changes. Its main limitation is the confused account of the 1985 expenditure figures, compounded by recurring awkward collocations and grammatical slips; the highest-priority improvement is to verify each series against the graphs and express comparisons with precise subject labels and standard comparative structures.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response presents a relevant overview and covers the principal trends and most key figures from both graphs, although it confuses the 1985 health and education expenditure values.
Check every percentage against the correct series and include the rise in life expectancy explicitly in the overview.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information progresses logically from the introduction and overview to expenditure and then demographic outcomes, but the single-block presentation and a few vague references weaken clarity.
Separate the overview and the two visual descriptions into clear paragraphs, with each comparison anchored to an explicit subject.
Lexical Resource
The response uses a sufficient range of reporting vocabulary, but recurring collocational problems such as “more ratio,” “health division,” and “child death cases” reduce precision.
Use standard Task 1 combinations such as “a higher proportion,” “health expenditure,” and “infant deaths per thousand births.”
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex structures communicates the data clearly, though agreement, article, comparison, and noun-form errors recur.
Proofread subject–verb agreement, plural forms, and comparative patterns, especially replacing “double than” with “almost twice.”
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The graphs below show the Expenditure on Health & Education, UAE as percentages of GDP and Infant mortality and life expectancy.
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