Some people believe that children should be allowed to stay at home and play until they are six or seven years old. Others believe that it is important for young children to go to school as soon as possible. What do you think are the advantages of attending school from a young age?
Sample Response
There has always been a considerable debate over the topic whether children should enlist to the school as young as possible or they should spend their time at home playing games until they become seven years old. The main reason why many people favour the opinion that children should spend their time at home until they are seven is that they think younger ages are really important for the brain development and they are afraid of the misguidance possibility of their children. Unfortunately,But, unfortunately, this action increases the likelihoodtendency of becoming introvertedan introvert human being later in life. For instance, athe childhood spent without friends could lead to a more computer-based lifestylecould create more computer-based lifestyle later in lifewhen the person gets old. On the other hand, children who spend their childhooda generation that spends their childhood in school will most likely gainmost likely will gather more understanding of their peersinformation about their peers. Also, children will have many opportunitiesa lot of chance to learn to interactlearn about interaction with other children and this will help them to have valuablepriceless memories with their friends. Furthermore, they will have the opportunity to learnget a chance to have been taught a wide range of educational material and experienceslimitless education materials or experiences by their teachers who know how to teachwho are already aware of how to teach even the most problematic children. In addition, they will learn about cultural and historical information by visiting museums and festivals. Moreover, they are less likely to spend their livesthey don't have to spend their life in front of a computer when they get older because they have already developed communication skillsbecause of their already improved communication skills. To summarise all my points that I explained so far, I believe that the benefits of sending children to school as soon as possible undoubtedly overweight the disadvantages which are nearly disregardable.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response identifies several relevant advantages of early schooling, including social interaction, teacher-guided learning, cultural exposure, and stronger communication skills. Its main weakness is uneven focus: substantial space is spent on the home-schooling debate, while the school benefits are listed more often than fully explained. Prioritise two well-developed advantages with clear cause-and-effect reasoning and a realistic example for each.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The question is answered with multiple relevant benefits of early schooling and a clear favourable view, although development is somewhat list-like and indirect.
Focus less on defending the home option and develop social skills and structured learning through specific, credible examples.
Coherence and Cohesion
The ideas follow a broadly logical sequence, but the single long paragraph and mechanical series of linking words weaken organisation.
Separate the introduction, social advantages, educational advantages, and conclusion into distinct paragraphs with clear topic sentences.
Lexical Resource
The response shows adequate range for childhood, education, and social development, but several inaccurate collocations reduce clarity.
Use natural phrases such as 'start school', 'risk of social isolation', 'interact with peers', and 'access varied learning experiences'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Complex structures are attempted, but frequent errors in articles, verb patterns, pronouns, and noun phrases reduce grammatical control.
Simplify long sentences and check forms after verbs, especially 'enrol in school', 'have opportunities to learn', and 'benefits outweigh'.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some people believe that children should be allowed to stay at home and play until they are six or seven years old. Others believe that it is important for young children to go to school as soon as possible. What do you think are the advantages of attending school from a young age?
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