Some people think that environmental problems are too big for individuals to solve, while others think that the government cannot solve these environmental problems unless individuals make some action. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In the contemporary world, the concern for the deterioratingdegrading environment is at itsthe peak. Some people believe it is difficult for an individual to make a difference, while others feel it cannot be solved without authorities intervening in the matter. This essay will discuss both sides in depthin-depth and will also state why I strongly agree that the government hashave an indispensable role in such matters. To begin, many believe the task of protecting the environmentsaving mother nature is too difficult for one persontedious for a single person. But if we introduce minor alterations to our day-to-day activities, we could probably eliminate the causes of environmental harmeradicate the detrimental causes to our environment. For instance, we can always bring along a reusablerecycling bag while shopping so that use of plastic bagsusage of the plastic bag would decrease. ThisThese will definitely help in minimising the air pollution caused by burning plastic bags. Thus, such actions from an individual could contribute to a healthier environmentcould lead to a healthy environment. In addition to individual actions,In contrast, to individual actions, governments also play a vital role in regulatingproviding checks to many such activities disrupting our ecosystem. Governments can impose stringent rules for their citizens to followrules to be followed by its people. For example, the useusage of plastic bags should be completely banned in the country, and this can only be enforcedforced by authorities. These regulations require judiciary powers to implement which reside with the respective officials. For this reason, the government plays a central rolethe cardinal part in the process of eliminating causes of environmental damagea process of abolishing effects causing damage to nature. To conclude, environmental degradation is increasing at an enormous rate. These problems should be tackled through collaboration between individuals and governmentswith the collaboration of an individual along with governments. Would it be ungreat? I firmly believeacknowledge the governments have a prominent role in resolving these issues.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 6.0

The response offers a clear general opinion and relevant examples of both individual and government action, so its central message is easy to follow. However, it only briefly engages with the claim that environmental problems are too large for individuals and sometimes substitutes a comparison of roles for a full discussion of the two stated views. Prioritise developing each view accurately before presenting the final collaborative position.

Band score breakdown

IELTS Writing Criteria Scores

TR

Task Response

6.0
Scoring rule

The response addresses individual and government action and states an opinion, but the first stated view is not adequately explained or supported.

Next step

Develop why some people consider individual efforts insufficient, then explain the opposing view before giving the personal judgement.

CC

Coherence and Cohesion

6.0
Scoring rule

Ideas follow a recognisable introduction-body-conclusion sequence, though the single-block presentation and mechanical transitions weaken paragraph-level organisation.

Next step

Use separate paragraphs for each view and ensure every contrast marker accurately represents the relationship between ideas.

LR

Lexical Resource

6.0
Scoring rule

There is sufficient environmental vocabulary and some less common language, but frequent awkward or inaccurate collocations reduce precision.

Next step

Replace forced expressions with natural combinations, particularly when describing pollution control, legal authority, and environmental damage.

GRA

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

6.0
Scoring rule

A mix of simple and complex forms is attempted, but recurring agreement, article, reference, and sentence-structure errors limit control.

Next step

Proofread each sentence for subject-verb agreement and clear pronoun reference before adding more complex clauses.

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IELTS Writing Task 2

Some people think that environmental problems are too big for individuals to solve, while others think that the government cannot solve these environmental problems unless individuals make some action. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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