Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Sample Response
There is an old saying - 'Give me an educated mother and I will give you an educated nation'. This proverbprover emphasises women's educationthe women education. Throughout historyThroughout the history men and women have both workedmen and women both worked together to build a better world and whatever stage the current world is in, that has been contributed both by male and female - surely not by one gender. As university education is so important for the full development of a person's abilities, skills and knowledgefull bloom of one person's merit, skill and knowledge, equal opportunity for both male and female students should be ensured. To begin with, if only men advance in educationgo ahead in education, research, arts, history while women stay at homehistory and women stay home, then no good can be done. History suggestsThe history suggests that men are more numerous indominant in numbers in science, arts, engineering, creativity and business sectors. But we cannot deny the contribution of Mother Teresa and Madam Merry Currie who have devoted their whole life to the betterment of the world. It is true that if the competition is arranged regardless of gender, more male students will be ahead of women. But still, universities should accept equal numbers of male and female studentsan equal number of students. If fewer women hold important positionsfewer females hold the important sectors of a country, naturally women will feel deprived and this will lead them to compete with men. It is a mother who is much more emotionally attached to their children and friendlier to children than fathers. So they help the children with their studiesin their study. So the importance of women's higher educationfemale education in the higher level should receive priorityshould get a priority in view of this issueconsidering this single issue. In conclusion, universities should accept the same number of students from both sexes and provide equal opportunitiesgive an equal opportunity at every level.
Why this response received Band 5.5
The essay clearly supports equal access for men and women and recognises the value of female education, so its central stance is easy to identify. However, much of the support is loosely relevant or based on stereotypes, and it does not directly examine the demand for equal numbers in every subject or the implications for merit-based admission. Focus the argument on subject-level quotas and develop relevant reasons about fairness, aptitude, and opportunity.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
A clear agreement is maintained, but the argument treats general female education rather than equal enrolment in every subject and relies on weakly relevant support.
Address subject-level quotas directly by explaining how equal numbers would affect fair access, candidate merit, and courses with uneven applicant pools.
Coherence and Cohesion
The position and conclusion are identifiable, but the unbroken paragraph, repeated basic connectors, and loosely ordered examples weaken progression.
Organise the response into an introduction, two focused reasons about university admissions, and a conclusion that synthesises those reasons.
Lexical Resource
The response attempts a reasonable range, but frequent word-form and collocation errors such as prover, women education, and full bloom limit clarity.
Use precise academic phrases such as proverb, women's education, fulfilment of potential, admissions criteria, and equal access.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Frequent errors in articles, agreement, pronouns, comparison, and sentence structure sometimes make the intended relationships difficult to follow.
Build shorter complete sentences and check singular-plural reference carefully, especially when moving between a mother, women, children, and fathers.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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