Some people say that international sporting events contribute greatly to peace and stability in the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Sample Response
Major international sporting events are often considered by many to be platformsconsidered by many as platforms for athletesathletes and sportspersons to perform and bring glory to their nations while promotingpositively promoting global harmony. However, it is the realitya cruel reality that such international events fail to promote global peacepeace and accord, and are often subject to controversy and conflictconflicts. This is why I disagreeThis is why, I disagree with the opinion that such international sporting competitions contribute positively totowards global stability, peace and unity.
To begin with, when players display excellent sportsmanship in a major sporting event, global audiences tendthe global audience tent to enjoy the performance. But, it has almost no impact on the politics of the two rival nations and lasting peace between them. For instance, millions of people enjoy watchingwhen players of India and Pakistan perform in cricket stadiums. It often brings citizens of these two countries together, but it fails to make any positive impact on the political relationshiprelationships between these two nations.
Moreover, major sporting events are stages for competitionare the stages for competitions, and there is always a winning and a losing team. A decision madeThe same decision made by a match referee is welcomed by the fans of a nation while vehemently opposed by supporters of the other teamthe supporter of another team. It is not a conducive approach to supporting peace, unity and brotherhood among people from different nations. Rather, it sparks argumentsargument and controversy. For instance, after most World Cup competitions, people have differingdiving opinions about the decisions made by referees, and they never tend to agree with the opposing supporters. It has even sparked fights and conflicts in and out of stadiums.
To conclude, international sporting events may be effective in bringing people of different nations to the same playground, but due to their competitive nature and associated controversiescompetitive natures and controversies, and no lasting impacts on the politics and policies of rival nations, they fail to help promote peace and harmony among nations.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response maintains a clear disagreement and supports it with two relevant lines of argument, especially the distinction between public enjoyment and lasting political peace. Its main limitation is that several claims are broad and some examples stop short of explaining the mechanism fully. Prioritise deeper analysis of how competition or controversy affects international relations, while tightening awkward wording and word-choice slips.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The position is clear throughout, and two relevant reasons are supported with examples, although some broad claims limit the depth of analysis.
Extend one example step by step to show precisely why a sporting event does or does not produce a lasting diplomatic effect.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response follows a logical four-part progression with focused paragraphs, though some transitions and links between claims are mechanical.
Vary the linking language and make the relationship between each claim and its supporting example more explicit.
Lexical Resource
Topic vocabulary is varied and generally effective, but several imprecise or incorrect choices reduce precision.
Replace overstated or misaligned expressions with more exact collocations and proofread carefully for word-choice and spelling slips.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A useful range of complex sentence forms is generally controlled, with occasional article, number, agreement, and punctuation errors.
Check agreement, plural forms, clause linking, and comma placement so complex sentences remain consistently accurate.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some people say that international sporting events contribute greatly to peace and stability in the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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