Nowadays, international tourism is the biggest industry in the world. Unfortunately, international tourism creates tension rather than understanding between people from different cultures. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Sample Response
In recent times, the role of the tourism industry in the world economy cannot be neglected. The tourism industry has emerged as one of the biggest industriesindustry in the world, providing jobs to millions. Often it is said that the worldit is said, that world is becoming smaller, and I believe it is because of frequent international travelthis frequent international travel. I do not agree that international tourism creates tension; in fact, it brings different culturesculture together. When a person travels from one country to another, they learn about each other’s culture, cuisine and habits. People become more tolerant towards each other’s differences. International tourism helps people experiencehelps people in experiencing the natural beauty which could not be found in their own countriesfound in their country. I believe, due to increased international travel, people have become more toleranthave subdued. For instance, places such as the Maldives, Thailand and Goa in India thrivecountries like Maldives, Thailand, India (Goa) etc. thrives on tourism and we can clearly notice the difference between people’s attitudesthe people’s attitude towards each other in these places and those elsewhereas compared to others. People are friendlier, understanding and accommodating. They are ready to change themselves easily to cater to new demands of touriststourist. Another good example would be Dubai, which is part of UAE but is very different from the other emiratesdifferent than any other emirates. It is because of international tourism that Dubai is more tolerant, modern and developedmore tolerant and modern and developed. The biggest advantage of international tourism is thatThe biggest pros of international tourism are, we can learn a lot from different countries. For instance, if you go to Singapore, you cannot help but notice how effective its public transport systemtheir public transport systems is andare; and how stringently all the rules are followed. Similarly, many tourists come to India to seek spiritual guidance and to learn yoga, which may not be available in their home countrieswhich they might not get in their country. In a nutshell, I thinkI think, international travel alleviates tension between nationsbetween the two nations rather than creating it.rather than creating. In today’s economy, when every country is interdependent for trade and business, international travel helps people from different countries to understand each other and exist in harmony.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response maintains a clear position and supports it with several relevant examples of how tourism can encourage learning and tolerance. Its impact is reduced by one-block organization, some loosely connected or unclear claims, and recurring language errors; the highest priority is to divide the argument into focused paragraphs and explain each example more precisely in relation to cultural understanding.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
A clear disagreement is sustained and supported with relevant reasons and examples, although some points are only loosely explained or tangential.
Develop fewer examples more fully by showing exactly how each one reduces cultural tension.
Coherence and Cohesion
The argument progresses broadly logically, but presenting the entire response as one paragraph weakens the grouping and prominence of ideas.
Use an introduction, focused body paragraphs with distinct central ideas, and a separate conclusion.
Lexical Resource
There is adequate range for discussing tourism and culture, but recurring word-choice and collocation errors reduce precision.
Replace inaccurate phrases such as people have subdued and demands of tourist with natural, context-appropriate expressions.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex structures communicates meaning clearly, despite recurring errors with articles, agreement, plurals, and punctuation.
Proofread systematically for article use and subject-verb agreement, especially around singular and plural noun phrases.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Nowadays, international tourism is the biggest industry in the world. Unfortunately, international tourism creates tension rather than understanding between people from different cultures. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
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