'Telecommuting' refers to workers doing their jobs from home for part of each week and communicating with their office using computer technology. Telecommuting is growing in many countries and is expected to be common for most office workers in the coming decades. How do you think society will be affected by the growth of telecommuting?
Sample Response
Telecommuting has become a buzzword not only among IT professionals but also among the general publiccommon folks. It brings about major changesa sea of changes in the workplace culture in many businesseswork culture of many business settings. Though some firmsbusiness firms are uncertain abouton the fence about this new concept, I believe thatmy two cents is that several positive changesinnovations will arise in society from telecommutingcome about in the society by this new concept.
Why this response received Band 4.5
The response is readable and shows some ability to use varied sentence structures and idiomatic vocabulary. However, at only 60 words, it functions as an introduction rather than an essay: it names a generally positive view but identifies no specific social effects and provides no explanation or evidence. The priority is to develop a complete multi-paragraph response covering several concrete consequences for society.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response offers a general positive position but does not identify, explain, or support any actual effects of telecommuting on society.
Write a complete essay that develops several specific social effects, such as changes to cities, families, workplaces, or inequality.
Coherence and Cohesion
The three sentences follow a basic introductory progression, but the extreme brevity prevents sustained organisation or paragraph development.
Organise the answer into an introduction, focused body paragraphs with clear topic sentences, and a concise conclusion.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary shows some range, but informal idioms and awkward collocations reduce precision and suitability for an academic response.
Replace expressions such as buzzword, common folks, on the fence, and my two cents with precise academic wording.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response uses both simple and complex structures with generally clear meaning, although some phrasing is grammatically awkward.
Improve control of articles and prepositions in phrases such as in society and caused by this development, then demonstrate this accuracy across a full essay.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
'Telecommuting' refers to workers doing their jobs from home for part of each week and communicating with their office using computer technology. Telecommuting is growing in many countries and is expected to be common for most office workers in the coming decades. How do you think society will be affected by the growth of telecommuting?
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