The pie chart shows the amount of money that a children's charity located in the USA spent and received in one year.
Sample Response
The pie charts depict income and expenditure in a year by an American charitablecharity organization for children. Overall, the children's charity had exactly six sources of funds and among them, the ultimate source was food donation whereas they spent their money in three sectors and program services cost them the highest percentage of money. While the charity largely spent money on the program service and it was precisely 95.8%, they vastly got their funds as donated food and it bought 86.6% of their yearly earnings. The second-largest income sourceThe second large income source was community contributionsthe community contribution, which accounted for 10.4%which was one-tenth; however, the second-largest expensethe second maximum cost was for fundraisingthe fundraising and it was 2.6% of total expenditure2.6% of the total cost. Moreover, there were four other sources of revenue for this organization:organization - program revenue (2.2%), investment income (0.2%), government grants (0.2%), and other income(0.4%). On the other hand, management and general expensescost accounted for 1.6% of the total expenditurebudget and it was the smallest category of expenditurethe lowest expenditure made by the charity. Furthermore, the total revenuetotal receiving fund was $53, 561,580 in a year and total expenditure wasthe total cost was $53,224,896 which shows a surplus of $336,684just over 330,000 saving for the charity thatthis year.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The strongest aspect is comprehensive and numerically accurate coverage, including the dominant donated-food revenue, program-services spending, all minor categories, both totals and the resulting surplus. The main limitation is expression rather than content: a single long paragraph and recurrent awkward collocations and grammatical structures reduce polish. Prioritise separating overview and details, then replace vague phrasing with precise revenue and expenditure language while retaining the accurate figures.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response provides a clear overview, reports all revenue and expenditure categories accurately, and correctly compares the annual totals and surplus.
Refine the overview by stating the slight overall surplus directly and avoid evaluative wording such as “ultimate source.”
Coherence and Cohesion
The sequence from overview to major shares, minor categories and totals is logical, but presenting everything in one paragraph limits the visual hierarchy of the report.
Use separate overview, revenue-detail and expenditure-and-totals paragraphs while retaining the current logical order.
Lexical Resource
The response shows adequate range for financial reporting, but collocations such as “vastly got,” “second maximum cost” and “total receiving fund” are repeatedly unnatural.
Use precise expressions such as “received most revenue from,” “second-largest expense,” “total revenue” and “surplus.”
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A variety of complex sentences conveys the data clearly, although agreement, article, pronoun and clause-linking errors recur across the response.
Keep the charity as a singular subject, control “while” and “whereas” clauses, and check articles and noun forms in financial comparisons.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The pie chart shows the amount of money that a children's charity located in the USA spent and received in one year.
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