The table below shows the consumer durables (telephone, refrigerator, etc.) owned in Britain from 1972 to 1983.
Sample Response
The table data compares the consumer durable ownershipelectronic appliance ownership by British families from 1972 to 1983.
In general, TV was consistently popularTV had always been popular among British citizens, and the dishwasher was the least common item during the given period.
As is observed from the given data, almost one-third households in Britain had central heatingcentral heating machines in 1972, and the percentage increased each year and reached 64%reached to 64% in 1983 - which shows that the central heating users almost doubled in just 12 years. Moreover, television was the most common household electronic consumer item as 93% of families93% families had them. This ratioration reached 98 percentreached to 98 percent with a slight increasewith slight increase year by year. However, the video was introduced in 1983 when only 18% of households18% houses had them. Besides, vacuum cleaners, refrigerators and washing machines were also common household appliances after TV. These three devicesdevice were owned between 66 andto 87 percent householdshouseowners in 1972, and the percentages increased to over 90, except for washing machine with almost 80% ownershipwonership, a decade later. Interestingly, dishwashers were less popular as only 3 to 5 percent families possessed them. Finally, four out of ten familiesone four of ten families had telephones in 1972, and after 12 years almost 80% familiesfamilied had a telephonetelephone set at their homes.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response identifies the principal ownership trends well, including the dominance of television, the rarity of dishwashers, and the strong growth in central heating and telephones. However, the crowded final paragraph, frequent language errors, and an unsupported final vacuum-cleaner figure weaken precision and readability. Prioritize checking every table entry, especially missing values, then group related appliances into shorter, clearly structured detail paragraphs.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response gives a clear overview and reports many important trends accurately, including high television ownership, low dishwasher ownership, and growth in heating and telephones. Some details are imprecise, and vacuum cleaner data is mishandled because the 1983 figure is not shown.
Check missing values carefully and avoid claiming a final percentage when the table has a dash.
Coherence and Cohesion
The information is generally organized from overview to details, but the long final paragraph contains too many categories and becomes crowded.
Split the details into high-ownership items, rising items, and late/low-ownership items.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is adequate, but several spelling and word-choice errors reduce clarity, such as "ration", "wonership", and "familied".
Proofread high-frequency nouns and use standard phrases such as "households owned" and "ownership rose".
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
There are frequent article, plural, and agreement errors, although meaning remains mostly clear.
Check noun agreement after numbers and percentages, especially "families", "households", and "devices".
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The table below shows the consumer durables (telephone, refrigerator, etc.) owned in Britain from 1972 to 1983.
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