The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002.
Sample Response
The table shows the data onfigures about the proportion of national consumer expenditureproportion of the money spent on different categories of consumptiontypes of consumptions in five countries in 2002.
It is clearThere is an obvious fact that Turkey ranked firstwas the first ranked in terms of consumer spendingconsumed money for both leisure and educationleisure time and education and eating, drinking and smoking. By contrast, residents of Sweden spentresidents in Sweden had spent the lowest proportion onthe least money for food, drinks and tobacco and clothingwearing.
In Turkey, roughly 32 percent of national consumer expenditurethe people’s budget was spent on foodwent for food, drinks and smoking. Ireland ranked secondSimilarly, Ireland is in the second order, people who lived there spent nearly 29 percent for that. However, Irish consumers spent onlythese people spent only approximately 2 percent of their money on leisure and educationto their education and spare time.
On the other hand, Italian citizens allocated the highest proportionallotted by far the highest rate of their budget (9%) to clothingbudget (9 %) to the clothing. The Irish, Spanish and Turkish people spent nearly the same proportion of money (6%) on the clothing. Swedish consumers paidSwedish people pay a little less for that.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response identifies several useful extremes and supports them with accurate figures, especially for Turkey, Ireland, Italy, and clothing expenditure. Its main limitation is incomplete coverage: it does not state that food, drink, and tobacco dominate spending in every country, and many country-category values are omitted. Prioritise a fuller overview and select comparisons that represent all five countries and all three categories.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The overview identifies valid national extremes and the selected figures are mostly accurate, but the dominant category across all countries and several important comparisons are omitted.
State that food, drink, and tobacco take the largest share everywhere, then compare representative highs and lows across every category.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response progresses logically from introduction and overview to food-related and clothing details, though the grouping leaves leisure and education underdeveloped.
Organise one detail paragraph around food expenditure and another around the two smaller categories, including comparisons across countries.
Lexical Resource
The response has adequate vocabulary for percentages and comparisons, but inaccurate collocations such as 'types of consumptions,' 'second order,' and 'spent money to' recur.
Use natural reporting phrases such as 'consumer categories,' 'ranked second,' 'accounted for,' and 'spent on.'
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of sentence structures communicates the data, but article, preposition, tense, agreement, and sentence-boundary errors are noticeable throughout.
Maintain past tense consistently for 2002 data and check articles, prepositions, and comma splices in comparative sentences.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002.
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