Plan A below shows a health centre in 2005. Plan B shows the same place in the present day.
Sample Response
Plans A and BThe plans, A and B, illustrate the refurbishment of a health centre at two points in time, in 2005 and at presentin two different years (2005 and the present). Overall, there have been substantialmassive changes in the health centre over the period given. The centre has clearly been enlarged and its layout has also been changed to meet the demand. In 2005, the main entrance was located in front of the health centre with 12 parking spacescar parking spaces outside. From the main entrance, there was seatingthere were some seats in the central waiting areaalong the hallway where clients could wait for consultationsfor clients to wait for consultation. At the end of the hallway, there was a reception desk Deletefor clients to register. In addition, an office and a consultation room were located toon the left of the desk, and toon its right, there were two consultation roomstwo more consultation rooms. Finally, a physiotherapy room was located behind the reception deskwas built behind the desk. At presentIn the present day, the layout of the centre has been revised. The main entrance is now situated on the left-hand sidein the left corner of the centre with a reception desk and an area for children to play. Meanwhile, there is a large common area in the middle of the centre for clients where seats are available alongside the wall. All original rooms and a newly added room called the minor operations room, on the other hand, are now allocated to the common area. Finally, the size of the car park increased by twice with 30 spaces.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response gives a strong overview and describes the major layout changes clearly, including the relocated entrance and reception, added facilities, and expanded parking. Most spatial details are accurate, but saying the car park increased by twice is inconsistent with the rise from 12 to 30 spaces, and a few location phrases lack precision. Correcting numerical comparisons and sharpening spatial language would make the report fully reliable.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The overview and most key changes are well selected and accurate, with one notable error in quantifying the car-park expansion.
State that parking increased from 12 to 30 spaces and describe rooms as opening onto, rather than being allocated to, the common area.
Coherence and Cohesion
The report progresses clearly from the overall transformation to the 2005 layout and then the present arrangement.
Use separate body paragraphs and reserve contrast markers such as on the other hand for genuine contrasts.
Lexical Resource
A good range of map-related vocabulary conveys the redevelopment, although massive, allocated, and increased by twice are imprecise.
Choose exact expressions such as substantially enlarged, arranged around the central seating area, and increased to 30 spaces.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Complex sentences are used with generally sound control, but a few comparative and prepositional constructions are inaccurate.
Refine quantity structures by writing increased to 30 or became two and a half times the original size.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
Plan A below shows a health centre in 2005. Plan B shows the same place in the present day.
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