The diagram below shows the average hours of unpaid work per week done by people in different categories. (Unpaid work refers to such activities as childcare in the home, housework and gardening.)
Sample Response
The given column graph shows information on the average number of hours of unpaid workduration of unpaid works done by men and women of different categories.
As shown in the chartAs is presented in the illustration, married women who do notdon't have children do unpaid workthe unpaid-works (gardening, child care and houseworkhousehold works) 30 hours per week, whereas30 hours per week whereas married men do similar unpaid workthe similar unpaid jobs for about 18 hours per week. Women who have one or two childrenWomen, who have one or two children do such work for 50 hours per week50 hours/week but the men from the same category do only 17hours (approximately) each week. The women who have three or more childrenmore than 3 kids seem to do the greatest amount of unpaid workwork the highest amount of unpaid works per week and that is nearly 60 hours. By contrast, menSurprisingly male from the same category work even less, amounting to only 16 hours; amounting only 16 hours (approximately) of unpaid works.
In summary, women do most of the unpaid workwomen do the most of the unpaid jobs compared to men and as the number of children increaseswith the increased number of children women's workload increasesthis workload for women increases.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The report clearly compares men and women across all three family categories and accurately captures the contrasting trends as the number of children rises. Its main limitation is that it does not answer the instruction to suggest reasons, while recurring word-form and agreement errors reduce precision. Add a brief, plausible explanation for the gender gap and revise phrases such as "unpaid work" and "married men work" for grammatical control.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The figures, gender comparisons and overall trends are accurately reported, but the required reasons for the pattern are omitted.
Add one or two cautious reasons, such as unequal childcare and household responsibilities, after describing the main pattern.
Coherence and Cohesion
The introduction, detail paragraph and summary create clear progression, with comparisons ordered consistently by family category.
Improve flow further by reducing repeated reporting phrases and linking the numerical pattern directly to the concluding overview.
Lexical Resource
The response has enough vocabulary to describe the chart, but repeated misuse of "works," "male" and informal "kids" limits precision.
Use uncountable "unpaid work," plural "men," and the formal phrase "three or more children" throughout.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Meaning remains clear and some complex comparisons are used, but agreement, article, punctuation and noun-form errors recur frequently.
Check subject-verb agreement and sentence boundaries, especially in constructions describing what married men and women do.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The diagram below shows the average hours of unpaid work per week done by people in different categories. (Unpaid work refers to such activities as childcare in the home, housework and gardening.)
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