Some people warn that the era of the silver screen is coming to an end and that people will eventually lose interest in going to the cinema. Do you agree or disagree with this view?
Sample Response
Cinema is a form of entertainmentthe entertainment mode for many people. It is the most affordable recreational activity that is accessiblewhich comes in handy for all kinds of people. Considering the developmentIf we see the development in the field of cinema, there has been a substantial progresstremendous development in the field of the silver screen. In the past, cinemas were limited in numbercinema houses were limited but people used to go to cinema houses due to the lack of home entertainment optionsinadequacy of entertainment media in houses.
As technology developedAs the technology developed, the technical advancements in the field of home entertainment made entertainment more affordable.This affordability enabled everyone to havemade all to have their own entertainment systems. This change led to the downwarddowning trend of the people’s interest in cinemasinterest to the cinema houses. Eventually, after a certain period in the future, people might no longer comemight not be coming to the silver screen houses but would preferrather they would be liking to sit at home and enjoy.
If we see the recent number of people attending a cinemaattending to a cinema house, we have to accept the factagree to the fact that there has been a considerable drop in the number of people attending cinema houses. As far as my opinion is concerned, the euphoria of the silver screen is diminishing and it would not be surprisingsurprised to note that people will not go to cinemas in the futurepeople in future do not go to cinema house. If we consider an example of the cinema viewing experience, South India is a good example people used to see a movie in cinema hall and the released movie used to play in the allocated hall for at least 80 days but if we see the present situation a new movie in an allocated hall stays hardly for 2 to 4 weeks. There is a considerable drop in the viewing experience of people, the reason behind this is the availability of home entertainment, access to various other programs which are attractive than movies, piracy, change in lifestyle,competitive world bulldozed by career goals. Not only this, few moviesfew of the movies which are made now are not attractive in comparison with the movies of the earlier era, they do not possess entertainment valuevalues.
From the above, it can be adjudged that silver screen is definitely coming to extinction, maybe not in the near future but after a certain period of time, the cinema houses would stand as a monumental piece.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response maintains a clear agreement with the prediction and supports it with relevant reasons, including home entertainment, changing lifestyles and a regional example. However, development becomes repetitive and list-like, while awkward vocabulary and frequent sentence-level errors blur some explanations. The main priority is to build two focused arguments with specific support, then revise long sentences for accurate grammar, punctuation and natural word combinations.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
A clear position is maintained and supported with relevant reasons, though several claims are asserted or listed rather than fully explained.
Develop the strongest two reasons with clear causal explanation and specific evidence instead of adding a broad list.
Coherence and Cohesion
The paragraph sequence creates broad progression, but repetition, run-on sentences and an overloaded main paragraph weaken cohesion.
Give each body paragraph one central claim and connect supporting sentences through clear logical relationships.
Lexical Resource
The response attempts varied topic vocabulary, but repetition and unnatural collocations frequently reduce precision.
Replace awkward phrases with natural expressions and avoid repeating cinema houses, entertainment and development.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Several complex structures are attempted, but agreement, article, comparison and sentence-boundary errors occur frequently.
Break long clauses into controlled sentences and check articles, verb forms and comparative structures during revision.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some people warn that the era of the silver screen is coming to an end and that people will eventually lose interest in going to the cinema. Do you agree or disagree with this view?
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