It is said that day-by-day people’s lives are becoming increasingly stressful. What are the reasons behind that? What can be done to solve this problem?
Sample Response
These days, as humans have steppedas the human has stepped on the path of rapid changepath to transcendence, people are competing to be better every day. As time goes byAs the time goes by, many of us tend to beare tend to be afflicted by stressstressful feeling. Actually, there are some reasons behind this problem. In this essay, I will explain the reasons why it can happen and try to propose some solutions to tackle this matter. Regarding the first reasonAs regard the first, the reason why people are having stressful liveslife is because of their lifestyle. Every individual tends to fulfil their needs and desiresfulfil their need and desire. They earn money as much as they can and spend almost the whole dayspent almost along the day for work. However, people only need a short time to spend their money for buying everything that they want. This phenomenon can cause stress among people. Secondly, stressstressfulness can happen because of the competitive atmosphereambience among each individual. People are competing to appear perfect all the timelook perfect every time. In every facet of our life, people like to compete. For instance, they compete in jobs, study, finance, appearance, and in other aspectson the other aspects of our life. However, the fact is not all the people are able to fulfil their need as their wish. Only the rich and wealthy people can do that. Therefore, it can raise stressfulness. These days people needneeds to outperform others in the study, job and in other social affairs and these are a fewand these are few of the main reasons for the increased stress and pressure among us. The technological advancement has made our life easier on the one handin one hand and at the same time, this is another reason for the stressfulpressured life for many. I think that there are so many practicalimpeccable solutions to cope with this problemcope this problem. Firstly, people have to manage their time and finance properly. They have to balance their personal and professional life and do not need to obtain everything that they want. People should look at the others who have a poorer life than us. They also should refresh their mind after spending the hectic stressful schedule by taking a walk to interesting places such as beach or mountain. Thus, people can feel free and relaxed. They should not think too much about earning money. In conclusion, positive life, satisfaction and balanced life can reduce the stress we have to a great extent. As competition is one of the main reasons for increased stress nowadays, we should not rival others in every aspect. AThe positive mentality and happy family bonding can help us achieveachieving a life with less stress.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response’s strongest feature is its relevant coverage of several causes of stress and plausible remedies, including better balance and time management. However, the ideas remain general, the single-block presentation weakens progression, and frequent language errors reduce clarity; prioritise dividing the essay into purposeful paragraphs and supporting each cause with a concrete example that shows how the corresponding solution would reduce stress.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The essay answers both parts with relevant reasons such as work pressure, competition, and lifestyle, and offers solutions such as better balance and time management. However, some ideas are general and not fully supported.
Give one concrete example for each reason and explain how each proposed solution directly reduces stress.
Coherence and Cohesion
There is a basic logical order from causes to solutions to conclusion, but the entire response is presented as one block. This makes progression difficult to follow and weakens paragraph-level coherence.
Separate the essay into an introduction, one paragraph for reasons, one paragraph for solutions, and a conclusion.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary includes relevant terms such as lifestyle, competitive ambience, professional life, and balanced life. Some word choices are awkward or inaccurate, and there is repetition of stress-related words.
Use natural collocations such as "stressful lifestyle", "competitive environment", "work-life balance", and "cope with this problem".
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A range of sentence structures is attempted, but frequent errors in verb forms, agreement, prepositions, and articles reduce accuracy. Meaning is usually understandable but sometimes strained.
Focus on subject-verb agreement and preposition patterns, especially "tend to", "spend time", and "cope with".
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IELTS Writing Task 2
It is said that day-by-day people’s lives are becoming increasingly stressful. What are the reasons behind that? What can be done to solve this problem?
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