Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Sample Response
Some people advocate for making all information available in scientific research, business, engineering, and academiascience, business, engineering and research as they believe that sharing information in such fields to the fullest extent possible will ultimately benefit society. Others, however, think that some information, including state secrets, issome information and state secrets are too sensitive to be shared freely. This essay explores both perspectives. In my opinion, key national sectorsimportant sectors in a country should have unrestricted access to valuable data.
On the one hand, those who are against sharing all information freely considerfreely, consider the sensitivity of the information in question. Intellectual property rights are an important consideration here, as inventors and researchers invest their expertise and significant sums of moneyinvest both their knowledge and significant amounts of money to achieve their goals. Publishing their findings can prevent them from fully reaping the rewards of their hard work. A good example is "Apple Inc." which invented different ingenious technological devices, and if the research data were published, it would not be able to earn profits as there would be competitors who would use the findings and compete in the market. Similarly, state agencies should not allow third parties to access their data as it may put national security at riskput the country's freedom in danger.
On the other hand, supporters of making informationthe supporters of making information freely accessible for scientific, commercial, and academic purposesaccessible for science, trade and academic purposes assert that such access promotes innovation and developmentit brings innovation and development to a nation. By sharing new findings and relevantuseful data, society can advance more rapidlyprogress and prosper faster. For example, after the discovery of the first antibacterial drug was made public, it allowed the entire world to benefit from its use as an effective medication against infectious diseases. Additionally, sharing valuable informationvaluable and meaningful information can lead to collaboration and progress in research, as well as the development of new technologies and products that benefit a nationproducts for a nation. It is also apparent that a society, where people have limited access to information, is less likely to become pioneers in technology, invention and research.
In conclusion, even though it is important to respectappreciate the rights of individuals and businesses to protect their intellectual property, a nation's progress and prosperity should receive greater prioritythe progress and prosperity of a nation should get more priority, and ultimately, sharing informationultimately, the sharing of information can lead to greater advances and broader benefitsgreater advancements and benefits for all.
Why this response received Band 7.5
The response presents a clear, well-organised discussion supported by relevant explanations and examples, with a consistent preference for wider access to information. Its main limitation is that the position is phrased somewhat differently in the introduction and conclusion, while a few claims are broad or imprecise. The highest-priority improvement is to define the preferred limits on information sharing more precisely and sustain that exact position throughout.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Both views are addressed and the writer's position is clear overall, with relevant ideas that are generally well developed.
State one precise policy on what should be shared and develop it consistently from the introduction through the conclusion.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ideas progress logically through clear paragraphs, and cohesive devices generally guide the reader effectively.
Tighten a few long sentences and avoid unnecessary internal punctuation so relationships between ideas remain effortless to follow.
Lexical Resource
A broad and topic-appropriate vocabulary conveys nuanced ideas, although a few collocations are awkward or imprecise.
Replace expressions such as 'get more priority' and broad terms such as 'freedom' with more precise academic wording.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response uses varied complex structures with good control, though several punctuation, agreement, and phrasing errors remain.
Review comma placement and agreement in complex sentences, especially around relative clauses and singular collective subjects.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
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