In some countries today, there is an attitude that ‘anyone can do it’ in the arts – music, literature, acting, art, etc. As a result, people with no talent become rich and famous and genuine talent is not valued or appreciated. Do you agree or disagree?
Sample Response
How do people become artists?people become an artist? This question is a widely discussed issuea really fashionable trend in many parts of the world. Talentless people become artistsTalentless people become an artist because of luck, a good opportunity, and networking. These reasons are commonly used by artists who are popular with this trend. I tend to disagree with this viewissue because becoming an artist is not about luck. I will outline the reasons and examples to support my arguments.
The job of an artist is honourablean honourable job. S/he is public figures whom people always stare on their performance both in their real life and on their stages. Therefore, they need to give their besttheir best in their life to entertain people. They have to prepare thoroughly and work hardmake a great preparation and hard work before becoming an artist, so their performance will not disappoint their fans. For example, singers should train their voicesvoice, learn about tunes and songs before their voicesvoice are enjoyed by many people. A singer who gets that "singer" title without ability will gain the bad judge even s/he produce a good song by the citizen.
In addition, artists who are inexpertartists who inexpert in their field usually cannot surviveare usually cannot survive for a long time, because they cannot giveperform a good performance. Take YouTube artists as an exampleTake YouTube artists as examples, they are only famousthey only famous for several months and disappear because they lack the necessary abilitylack the capability.
It is true that everyone has their own luck and deserves to pursue opportunitiespursue the chance, but it cannot be denied that for a particular job such as being an artist requiressuch as artist need special ability and capability.
To sum up, I must say that people have to prepare themselves well before they act as public figures to survive in that industry. In my opinion, as a naturalnature talent, being an artist is really a special career, therefore I disagree that people get that job only because of luck and no attempt to get that position.
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response maintains a clear disagreement and offers relevant reasons about preparation, skill, and career longevity in the arts. Its main limitation is that these ideas are only partly developed and sometimes reduce the prompt's broader claim to a question of luck, while frequent grammatical and collocational errors weaken clarity. The highest priority is to develop each reason with precise explanation and consistently accurate sentences.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
A clear position is maintained, but the prompt is addressed somewhat narrowly and supporting ideas remain limited.
Explain more directly how untalented fame affects genuine artists and develop each reason with a specific, relevant example.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response has a recognisable progression from position to reasons and conclusion, although paragraph development and linking are uneven.
Use each body paragraph for one fully developed reason and connect supporting sentences through clear logical relationships.
Lexical Resource
There is sufficient vocabulary to discuss artistic careers, but inaccurate word choice and collocations are frequent.
Replace awkward combinations such as descriptions of judgment, ability, and natural talent with precise, conventional collocations.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Some complex structures are attempted, but frequent errors in agreement, articles, sentence formation, and verb forms reduce accuracy.
Prioritise complete clause structures and check subject-verb agreement and article use throughout every sentence.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
In some countries today, there is an attitude that ‘anyone can do it’ in the arts – music, literature, acting, art, etc. As a result, people with no talent become rich and famous and genuine talent is not valued or appreciated. Do you agree or disagree?
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