In many countries nowadays, young single people no longer stay with their parents until they are married, but leave to study or work somewhere else. Do you think this trend has more advantages or disadvantages?
Sample Response
It is a fact that a lot of young people leave their parents' house when they complete their graduation from high schoolschools. They prefer to live independently as they continue their higher education or decide to work. This trend has its ownits' own positive and negative sidesside, but I personally believe that it has more benefits than drawbacksmore benefits than the drawback. On the one hand, many people believe that leaving their parents' houseleaving parents house at a young ageduring the young age has a disadvantage. It is undeniable that many young teenagers are not yet ready to live independently by themselves. Many of these people are not yet maturematured in making decisions and in differentiating between right andor wrong for them. As a consequence, many of the young people become addicted to narcotics and alcohol or may make serious personal mistakesbecame pregnant at a very young age. On the other hand, despite the disadvantage, living independently at athe young age has some advantages for them. Firstly, they will learn how to manage their own life and manage their timeappreciate the time. They learn how to set some priorities in their life, as they have to make schedules for studying, grocerygroceries shopping, doing the laundry or cleaning their apartment by themselves. Secondly, for those who leave their parents for work, they would reduce the burden of their parents. Parents could stop the financial supportsupports for their child and could be allocated for the younger children or for their retirement plan. In conclusion, it is true that many young age people choose to live independently these days after they have graduated from high school. DeleteAlthough the trend has a drawback, but I personally believe that it has more advantages for both the child and the parents as well.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response states a clear preference and supports it with relevant points about personal responsibility and reduced financial pressure on parents. Its main limitation is that some claims are overgeneralised, while the single-block presentation and recurring language errors weaken clarity and precision. The highest priority is to structure the argument into focused paragraphs and develop the advantages with more specific, credible examples.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The essay answers the advantages-versus-disadvantages question and gives a clear preference, with relevant examples, though some claims are generalised.
Make the disadvantage paragraph less extreme and add one more concrete example of independence improving study or work outcomes.
Coherence and Cohesion
The argument is logically sequenced, but it is presented as one long paragraph and relies on basic linking phrases.
Use paragraph breaks and clearer topic sentences for disadvantage, first advantage, second advantage, and conclusion.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is adequate and sometimes topic-specific, but word choice and collocation errors reduce precision.
Use natural phrases such as leave the family home, become mature, financial support, living expenses, and personal responsibility.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Sentence control is generally understandable, but errors with articles, plural nouns, and verb forms appear regularly.
Check noun phrases after of, avoid unnecessary articles, and keep verb tense consistent.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
In many countries nowadays, young single people no longer stay with their parents until they are married, but leave to study or work somewhere else. Do you think this trend has more advantages or disadvantages?
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