The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.
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Sample Response
The graph provides a visual representation of the average monthly percentage change in the prices of three different metals, namely copper, nickel and zinc in the year 2014.
Overall, the metals fluctuatedillustrated a fluctuation during the year. In January nickel was at its peakhighest peak, before reporting a sharp drop in percentage changedecrease in number, from 6% to 1%, in March. Between March and May, no major changes were recorded before June, when the number dropped to its lowest point, to -3%. After this, the figure showedAfter this, figure showed slight increases, before reaching 1% at the end of the year.
As for zinc, it reported a sharp increase between January and February, before starting to show a slight decrease over a three-month period. In June, the number dropped significantly from 1% to -1%. In the following months, zinc remained stableshowed a stable number, before rising to 2% at the end of the year.
Lastly, copper recorded a moderate decrease from the beginning of the year untiltill May, before recovering to -0.5% in June before reaching 1% in Julyrising to 1% in July. Between July and September it remained stable, before rising to approximately 1.5% in December after a few reported changes.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response effectively presents key features and accurate data points for all three metals, supported by a clear overall overview. Main ideas are organized logically by dedicated paragraphs for each metal, creating a smooth progression throughout the report. To enhance performance further, focus on improving vocabulary precision around quantitative data and refining minor grammatical errors such as missing articles.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
Key features and trends across all three metals are reported accurately alongside a clear overall overview.
Synthesize key comparisons directly between the metals rather than describing each metal completely in isolation.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response is organized logically into distinct paragraphs with clear overall progression and appropriate linking words.
Use a wider variety of transitional devices to link key comparative details smoothly across sentences.
Lexical Resource
A good range of trend vocabulary is used appropriately, though some phrasing for numbers remains slightly repetitive.
Replace generic expressions like 'decrease in number' with more precise data vocabulary such as 'drop in percentage change'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Sentences feature a good mix of complex structures with generally strong accuracy throughout the description.
Ensure consistent use of definite and indefinite articles before nouns like 'figure' and 'fluctuation'.